Oh Wow! I just finished your story and I thought it was absolutely amazing! Your attention to detail is wonderful. The accuracy and historical content made it believable. You are truely talented. Can't wait to check out your other stories!! :)

I have to say, this is one of the best fics (and not even just in the Kingdom of Heaven fandom) I've read. Your writing is impeccable in grammar and spelling, the characters are real and believable, and (perhaps most importantly, for me) the story was realistic inside the historical context of the film. Very well done! I commend you for having researched the timeperiod so well, and twined the information so well within the story. The whole thing was, I thought, credible; I studied the crusades in college and have read William of Tyre's accounts, so I figure I have some credibility as a reviewer.

I liked how you protrayed Sibylla and Audemande as strong, intelligent women without making them anachronistic or out of sync with the times. I also liked the way you treated the romance between Nasir and Aude--slow and realistic and based in their shared love of poetry.

But yes, I just wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed reading your story, and how well I think you wrote it.

Finally- my monster review! (=
Aw, truly, first of all, the epilogue was great. The notion of Sybilla telling her children about Dove is an interesting one and it was very cleverly-executed, so kudos to you! Of course I am sad that it is finished, but everything has an end, right? I loved your story. I really did. Everything was wonderfully thought-out , meticulously-researched and it painted a vivid picture of what life might have been like in those days. I have grown very fond of Aude and Nasir both, over the course of this story. What would Sybilla think, I wonder, if she knew the true story in all details? It's sad to think that she will probably never meet Aude again. I also liked how you worked the title of your story into the Epilogue once again. I'm very much looking forward to reading more of your work in the future! What about that story you told me that you are thinking of writing- you know the one that will take you far away from the 12th Century?
Anyway, this story was brilliant and wonderful to read. Thank you for this masterpiece! Truly marvellous.
Greetings
Sachita (incognito...)

It's been a long time since I showed up (yet AGAIN, erratic author and reviewer that I am) but a horde of well-executed chapters is always worth turning up for, and as Song of a Peacebringer came to an end, I felt terribly sad - happy for Aude, because the lovely thing about Song of a Peacebringer was - it left you uncertain. There wasn't any sterotypical Gary-Stu written in for a happy ending - it could all have gone wrong for Aude. She could have been unhappily wed to Remy (though I certainly hoped she'd drop-kick him through a window). The uncertainty's over. The story has been told. All that remains for me as an awe-struck reviewer is - Thank you. You've taught me a lot about writing in the wake of a very entertaining and well-written story.

Wow I cant believe its finished! Im so glad you chose to write this story, and share it through fanfiction. You have an amazing talent, and use it well.

Ah! You did it! You updated! Truly, I loved these last chapters, but then again I love everything about your story. The bit with Tiberias's death was very sad of course, but I guess everyone has to do that once- dying is a natural process of life, but I am digressing, so once again back to those chapters. Therer were wonderful bits in them. I loved, for example, the descriptions of what people might be thinking of Aude's and Nasir's love in later years. The bit with the "beautiful maiden stolen away by a vicious Saracen lord" made me chuckle. If anything, the maiden helped him in the theft. The title of your story was well-woven in that last chapter- the song of a peacebringer indeed! A very befitting title for Baldwin. The poem at the end of the chapter tops it all off and seems the perfect description for Aude's and Nasir's story. I apologise for my English today- the words just don't come to me and so I am left fumbling around with awkward constructions.
I am looking forward to the Epilogue and you will receive a very long review then (= So, wonderfully-done and very well-written, as always!
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P.S.: Did you write it all again or did you manage to recover the files?
P.P.S.: A message will come soon as well!

I was enjoying this story very much until I realised that the hero was going to be Imad ad-Din. I mean, IMAD AD-DIN - the most conceited pillock with the most overblown prose style of the 12th century, enthusiast for mass rape! Sorry, I just can't swallow that. If you had called him Nasir, the story would have been fine for me. That's after all why the name was changed for KoH - quite late on in production somebody read the passage below and realised that Imad ad-Din just wasn't a candidate for the role of Good Sexy Muslim...

"Women and children together came to 8,0 and were quickly divided up among us, bringing a smile to Muslim faces at their lamentations. How many well-guarded women were profaned, how many queens were ruled, and nubile girls married, and noble women given away, and miserly women forced to yield themselves, and women who had been kept hidden stripped of their modesty, and serious women made ridiculous, and women kept in private now set in public, and free women occupied, and precious ones used for hard work, and pretty things put to the test, and virgins dishonoured and proud women deflowered, and lovely women prostrated, and untamed ones tamed, and happy ones made to weep! How many noblemen took them as concubines, how many ardent men blazed for one of them, and celibates were satisfied by them, and thirsty men sated by them, and turbulent men able to give vent to their passion."

Apart from that, a few other criticisms:

- As you say, there were women poets, and I could swallow Aude having the role of court poet and even being rewarded with a tiny fief. But the notion of Young Raymond believing it even possible that Raymond might make her his heir just does not compute, it's so utterly non-medieval. I found the whole "Remy" character unsatisfactory, frankly. And he is such an overtly obnoxious young idiot that it greatly detracts from the characters of Eschiva and Raymond that they are so fond of him.

- The Battle of Hattin and the siege and fall of Jerusalem were such shattering events that I found it quite disquieting that they are airily dismissed in a sentence or two. Even putting it at the most basic level, and leaving aside entirely the political, practical and religious cataclysm, Aude will just have had perhaps nine in ten of her male acquaintance at court killed. That rates more than a sentence, IMO.

- I’ve been waiting a long time for Raymond/Tiberias to get some love; I was deeply irked with petit parapluie for writing him off as “too old”. But even you write him a lot older than he was – he was in his mid-forties, and if William of Tyre is to be believed, as handsome as the ever-sexy Jeremy Irons. You have made Eschiva dull, staid and maternal too – she doesn’t have to be like that. Oh yes, and one thing we do know about Raymond is that he didn’t eat much; that bit about Eschiva having to head him away from the sweeties rang very false.

Another great update!! I was ready to reach through the screen and start yelling at Eschiva when she said the Aude would no longer be welcome in her house if she married Nasir. I also really liked the interaction between Nasir, Aude and Saladin. Cant wait to ready more.
Keep up the great work,
choirbandgeek

First of all I've been reading this sence it was published and I love it!. Aude is just a really strong person, to leave home to go to a foreign land,become the beloved of king and watch the place you called home be stripped of all the earthly things,people that make so. things like that would make a person want quit.but not aude she keep her head up! I am truly miss reading about her



P.S please throw in a wedding secen for me

Not that my falling off the edge of the earth is a good thing, but when I come back to find five or six wonderful, wonderful chapters waiting for me, I have to admit I get greedy like a little kid in a sweetshop! Of course, it reminds me what I've missed. The romance between Aude and Nasir is beautifully portrayed - and once more I stand in absolute AWE of your research skills.
Beautiful. I'm just sad it's coming to an end...
PP

awesome, awesome, awesome!

Oh, I love the hand-holding at the end! It must have taken Nasir a lot of courage to do that, but the moment was really, really sweet. I feel sad that Tiberias would pass away soon, but I'm really glad that he gave his blessing. I also like that not every authority in Aude's life is in favor of the match. While I may not necessarily agree with Eschiva, I get her point. It would be difficult for them both to be accepted in either the Muslim or the Christian worlds.

Ah! No )= Not only two chapters left )= Okay, and an Epilogue )= But still...ah. No. I am seriously addicted. How on earth am I supposed to cope without your story? I really think there has been, in all the five years that I have been reading stories, only one that I have loved as much as I love your story. I was concentrating on every little word in this chapter. And I looked up, what an Oud means only to be delighted when I first read about it in your chapter. The recitation was truly wonderful. I liked it a lot, and the story of Shirin and Khusrow fit very well to Nasir's and Aude's situation. And then- Saladin! I liked his part a lot- I think you capture his character, or what is known about him, very well. "Some men needed rich garments to make them look the part of kings – obviously the Sultan wasn’t one of them. " This sentence seems to tell a lot about Saladin, and it is a very well-chosen sentence. Once again I find myself completely delighted by your wonderful way of writing: "Words danced in her head as the desert stretched out on either side of their path, filling the void in her mind left by the shifting sands." *sighs* Just wonderful...Then, that last part. Tiberias's state made me feel with Audemande, that has to be terrible for her. I guess I can understand Eschiva though, and her reasoning. They are in a way caught between two worlds and they will probably encounter a lot of animosity because of that. Now I am very much looking forward to the next chapter. I am literally on pins and needles...But I will be patient. Yes. I can do that. (= *starts cheering* Wow! Such a long manuscript.
And have I already mentioned that I am a patient person and that I am looking forward to the next chapter? Yes? XD Well then, I can only repeat myself. And oh, by the way, I loved that last paragraph! Very very well-done.
Please update soon...
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P.S.:I can't really say that I expected what happened, no, but I had a feeling...

Yet another enthralling installment!
This story has captured everything I had hoped to read.
The story, plot, and the characters are brilliant and an absolute joy to get to know.
I look forward to reading more!
~Reece

*is feeding the unemployed writer* :D
Hi (=! Wonderful new update. But I will of course not leave it at that, but say a little more about it. "The rest of the world was an afterthought to them, a mere footnote on their writing." *melts* Oh, that sentence is so wonderfully-put and it moves so well along with the plot- beautifully-done, truly! Your way of writing is simply gorgeous. Gibreel seems to be a very nice boy- it is amazing that he respects Aude, though- with such a disapproving mother hovering in the background. Rayhana is probably afraid of losing her influence and of course, like any mother would, she tries to protect her son from negative influences or influences that she perceives as negative.
And the scenes with Nasir...I cannot tell you how much I loved them. Simply wonderful!
I chuckled at their banter- I could totally see them talking that way :D Again, kudos to you for all the research you do- I remember reading about those female knights the real Imad al Din wrote about to humiliate the Franks in those days...Oh, and then the end of your chapter! Very intriguing! I am really curious to know what will happen, when Audemande recites her poem. Thank you for that update, your story is always like a fresh breeze of air.
Hope to *hear* from you soon (=