omg soo sad!

wah!

That was so beautiful. It made me want to cry. But in a good way! Again, just beautiful.

Compliments:

A lot of things about your fic were really good! You had good grammar, perfect characterization of Leslie ("the Dark Master put a spell on me so I couldn't tread water."), and your songfic actually had more story than song, unlike some others I've read. :)

Criticism:

Eh, not much, but the thing you build around a castle to protect it is spelled m-o-a-t, not m-o-t-e. :)

What a beautiful and moving story! I think you captured the voice of Leslie really well, and her feelings were very well presented. You write with an elegant, moving style which grips the reader and makes for a very memorable piece. Very well done!

aww, a really cute fic. Not exactly original, but nicely written. Good job!