Great chapter :-D Looking foward to your next update :-D

UPDATE THIS FIC DAMMIT! I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT TT_TT IT'S AMAZINGZINGZING! MUCH LOVE TO THE PEOPLE!

Oh, that author's note at the end made me laugh. It's so sweet having a cute little toddler Sephiroth!

Aw...

Glad to see the continuation of this fic! It shows much promise!

Child talk is impressive.

Interesting premise. A few things:

1. Proofread as well as spell-check. I saw a few words (editions, array, restrains) that should have been otherwise written (additions, awry, restraints). The mix-ups distract from the story more than the misspellings would.

2. Be careful about the use of parentheses within the descriptive text. It is often better to break the sentences out than to have asides within longer sentences. They border on becoming run-ons.

That's really it. Otherwise, it's a good plot, though it seemed a bit short. I was looking for more! So I guess that means you should update soon ;)

Good fic. I think this has a lot of potential.

Interested to see where you will take this.