MORE MORE MORE MORE!MORE!MORE

PLEASE MAKE MORE!

I would glady take Misa's place!! Hell I would have done L that night. Please update soon most of the new fanfictions really suck its almost like watching a train wreck you don't want to keep reading but you can"t stop TT_TT

MAKE IT LONGER! maybe even some rape in there. PLEAASSE email me @

update soon plz ^^

that was a great story. another chapter would be nice or 2. i like the storyline so dramatic nice

Great job! i agree, there's not enough good quality fan fic of L X Misa! but this is amazing! good job! i think you should make more.

Wow, really good, im on the edge of my seat for the next chapter! wonder if L will rape misa o_o

ok thats it...i hate this fanfic. i only like fanfics where they are in love! or at least LIKE EACHOTHER!! IN HERE SHE THINKS HE'S REVOLTING AND HE DOESN'T EVEN CARE FOR HER! ja ne!~ please UPDATE ASAP!

aww YOU 2 SHOULD BE HAPPY! You know you love eachother! ja ne!~ please UPDATE ASAP!

Please update.
Too good of a story!
D:

UPDATE PLEASE!

this story is getting good! please update soon and keep up the good work!

An interesting story idea. But there is some critique that I'll be offering:
First of all, try not to add parentheses with your own comments in the middle of the story, it's very distracting. And likewise, try to avoid using "I" and referring to yourself while telling the story altogether. Unless you're going for a casual, sarcastic approach, it makes the writing seem unprofessional. If you have comments to say or things to explain, you could try to do so before the chapter starts, or you could place a number next to the part you think needs explaining and get to it at the end of the chapter. But don't worry about this too much, I used a lot of parentheses when I started writing fanfiction, too :)
Second, please try not to switch points of view too much. Unless it's necessary in order to fully understand what is going on in the story, it's annoying more than anything, in my opinion. In this chapter's case, since we need to know that Matsuda messed up in giving Misa L's room number, you could simply write the story in third person by saying something like, I dunno, "While Misa waited impatiently outside the door, Matsuda realized that he had given her the wrong number and prayed she wouldn't kill him" or something like that.
I'll overlook that this story scenario is completely impossible given that it amuses me so much, but I also have to mention that I think L is a bit out of character. I realize that the government's on his tail, but I think he respects/likes Misa too much to even *think* about resorting to rape. If he did give her a certain amount of time to get over Light, he'd give her some more time than a week, he knows how much she cared for him, and also since he's not too crazy about the idea himself, he'd probably want to give himself some time to get used to their new arrangement. Which reminds me... what did happen to Light? Could you touch up on that in the next chapter?
But I will say that in chapter one, I started cracking up when L asked why they didn't just make him a statue and Watari asks "Of what, a giant L?" Hilarious XD Can't wait for the next chapter :)

MORE! PLEASE!