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| Sarah303 2008-07-26 ch 2,  | abuseUm, why are you stopping after one chapter? No offense, but people really don't do the, "Review or I won't update" unless they've gone 30+ chapters with absolutely no reveiws... And not even then because this truly scares away readers... I thought it was a great start, but if you're going to stop so soon, hmm... |
| theharvestquill 2008-07-20 ch 1, | abuseI honestly had mixed feelings about this story... It seems a small bit strange that this boyfriend tried to burn a cat (I mean, WHO the heck does that?), can you think of a more realistic setup? Jamie seemed to be, well, almost connected to Ella and why did he desperately need to see? And if he was knocked out, wouldn't he need to see BEFORE he blacked out? On the plus side, there was something about it that made me want to read on. It was pretty well written (spelling, grammar etc.) aside from the unrealistic setup. But the thing that REALLY annoyed me was the use of separate threads whenever posting a new chapter. Did you know that you can do it in ONE? It is cluttering up the boards. It's okay to do separate STORIES on separate threads, but please refrain from using multiple ones for the same story. Overall, thanks for a good read. |
| Rizu-chan 2008-07-19 ch 1, | abuseHey there! To be honest, I haven't read your story yet. I will though. The thing is, I noticed that you made a new thread to post your second chapter. The first thread could hold as many chapters as you like, you don't have to make a whole new thread to post another chapter. All you have to do is go to your account page and click 'stories' and then click 'edit' and add the second chapter to your story. I know that may have sounded awfully confusing, but I don't know any other way to explain it. I hope you get that straightened out. ^-^ Rizu-chan~ |
| Awesome Rapidash 2008-07-19 ch 1, | abuseWell you definatly have my interest! I liked the way you are developing the plot here. But maybe you could have Ella be a little less trusing, more of the guys given what happened to her with Kyle. But it's your story so you can do as you like. I did see some very minor spelling erors but nothing that detracked from the story. Oh, you leave us with an evil cliffhanger! And you won't be updating for a week! Argh, how will I survive? lol! In any case I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter once you get back! Cya then. |