aww

thats swet

i kind of had half jon

and half george

meh

im indecisive

:)

Wow, that is really good even without the lyrics. However, just as a suggestion, maybe you could try and make it more AJ or AG? Because at the start it was very AJ and I liked how you wrote it but then when you introduced the reference to the children and the note, I thought of George and I was a little confused at the end.

Sweet but sad. I liked it very much!

xoxo Sara

Wow, a really good one-shot. I like it. It is really cool how it can be either George, or Jon, or both. (I think it's both.) And I am listening to Requiem for a Dream, and it sounds really creepy and ethereal. So, yeah. : ) Keep writing!

love how it was so open to interpretation! very nice :)

A wonderful story that pulls on your heart-strings; amazing job!

Personally I love Jon and Alanna together but the mention of the spy network made it sound more like George. All in all very nice!

Ahh so sad. Loved it. Very nicely written.

Keep Writing,

xxTunstall Chickxx

Ooh... Sweet... I'll stop now. I think I'm going to cry...

Your sob story wasn't so bad. But you've done yourself a favour by going back to your roots :) I can see where it can be read in George's POV, but it lacks the possessive and personal tone that George probably would have taken. As an AJ shipper, I read it as more of a Jon monologue - its that longing and that frustration that comes through at the end. It was haunting, and great to read. This has actually inspired an idea, so if I come out with a one-shot sometime in the following weeks, just wanted to thank you in advance. Wonderful work!

I liked it a lot. I see how it could work for either Jon or George, but I thought more of Jon than George when I was reading this. You are going to keep this as a oneshot, right? I like it like this. I'm sorry it's harder for you to write now. I hope this helped. You're welcome, I guess... I'll go check out Come What May now.

cool i like it r u going to write more i hope u do