|Reviews for Miyu's Crush|
| DELETE ACCOUNT 1548864 8/21/08 . chapter 1
Your characterization needs some serious work. Understandable, considering the series has been out of print for, what, 8 years? And from your explanations of what Shimna are and how Miyu feels about Chisato, it is also apparent that you didn’t really fully understand the series.
Your formatting requires a bit more of the return bar, when you have something on the Documents page, you should look it over before you post it, just to make sure there aren’t any spelling/formatting issues.
Miyu is WAY too open with Chisato and completely OOC, to the point that she’s almost a Mary-Sue. I’m sorry this is so harsh, but part of getting reviews is also getting honest feedback.
I’d read your other chapters and review them too, but this is too painful for me to read. So sorry!
| ew 7/29/08 . chapter 1
they are not gay
| PKS 7/25/08 . chapter 1
kwl, this story sounds quite interesting, im going to story alert it! *holds three thumbs up*