Very clever last sentence. Well Done.

That was cute :) I really enjoyed the way you ended it.

Oho so now both Peter and Caspian want Susan's attention! lol Cute story!

yeah, that was pretty interesting. peter's still overprotective, and i wonder if caspian was imagining susan's arrow as a certain high king

Yhis is good.

Cute ^_^ I did one like this too. Can you read it? It's called 'Bow, Arrows and a Kiss'.

lol, that was great!! more please!

hahahaha, love it! please update soon!

I could've totally seen this scene in the movie. Great job!

Absolutely lovely! I can really picture it slotting into the movie...very succinct, well written and vivid. I loved it. :)