Great! I love it how you describe Nelsons thoughts about Lisa! It really fits and shows that he isn't ony a bully! Very nice!

Do you mind if i translate this into german?

Very nice indeed. I imagine Nelson would think of her like this, and I can totally see the situation at the end.

Easy to envision Lisa like this. It's only natural for her, isn't it? Nice final motivation, too, very typical - at least it gets SOME kind of rise from her, which is better than none at all.

Wow, I was impressed to see how well written this was. Usually all the short stories are stupid and have no point, but I certainly can't say that about this one. I was even afraid to read it, but then I was like "What the heck?". Great Job! I can't wait to read more of your stories!

This is lovely. I think you've converted me.

Oh, this is incredibly well written. Drabbley pieces aren't always written quite so well, and this one just seems to fit in with Nelson's thoughts. Wonderful job on this.

Very good. Drabbles are a rarity in this category: very short stories are usually completely, well, retarded. You pulled Nelson off in a very believable way.

However, a small nitpick: in ten years, Lisa would be just 18, too young to be a lawyer. I also wish this a tiny bit longer, but oh well...

really cute