just thught i'd how brillant this was. beautiful beyond words. loved it!

Wow Fray! Normally I'm not a big fan of Sev/Anyone, but..wow. This is very beautiful, I loved how you repeated 'their hair is the exact same shade of black', and the contrast between them was very well done. Your descriptions are nothing short of amazing, as always, and that last line was awesome.

(and we all know you're totally hovering in the background somewhere, perving on the slashy hotness of it all ;)

Very good.

This is certainly not what I was expecting, but I love. :) You have the most awesome descriptions I've come across, and I love the way the scene is set up, with the descriptions of the hot summer's day (Oh how I wish :), and the irony of the last line. =]

I love you forever.

-Cuba xx

that was stunning! however i think you mean "his" instead of "he" on the second line :)
wonderful way to put them together, and it all melded so perfectly ;) *loves this*
love, anie.

Oh jeez, Fray.

At first, I was like, Oh, fun story! Good writing! Regulus is smoking hot and smoking, it's all good and then what the ** EW!

But then I read it a few more times and it turned out okay. But first, EW.

But wonderful writing! :D

love Rye

oh my god! THIS IS BASE LOVE! (aka: i love it and i am so jelyous! i wish i could write like you, or cuba! gr, i hate my life of teaching! )

Fray you are amazzing!
I loved it. Again with the imagery! AWESOME!
It was fabulous. I love the idea with the Cig as well. And the last line is totally heart wrenching. And the idenical black hair thing. Just plain wow! Wow wow wow wow! xD
*Is in utter awe at Fray*

xCharli