Umm... Vaati's gone emo? That thought is odd. Lol.

Heh, Valoo... I wanna know what's up with Malina and Yuumei. :/

i love sora

I...couldn't finish this one...

This chapter seems half-assed, maybe because you wrote and posted it right after the last chapter. It isn't short, but it flow is to fast. It's like your screaming it. You're making tasks for your character to perform instead of making your character's perform tasks. The task is what your focusing on when you should be focusing on the character's reactions and thoughts when and because they performed the task.

Speedily made chapters are the death of a story. You had a billion things happening and didn't delve deep into anything. You were thinking and typing too fast.

Nice, 26! The most I got is 24. :p And none of those chapters are as long as these. (They're drabbles, really...)

HEY! I'm half asleep...

A shorter chapter, but nice. God...Daysin is in the dog house. What he said is true though, you don't stop loving people. I've never been "in love" with someone, but I've lost close relatives and friends and could never imagine my not loving them. There's room for everyone in one's heart, Daysin just needs to get over losing an ex.

So, keep it up and um...I'm half asleep...

P.S. Oh you had a nice trip, SEE YOU NEXT FALL! Oh, such a bad joke! I'm half asleep...

Awesome story! I love the romantical stuff in the adventure. My favorite kind of story! Continue A.S.A.P

i am happy you updated

I'm getting to the point where I don't need a end to your story. I usually hope that a person fic ends basically quickly, despite that I reading stories. It's so I can move on, feel like I accomplished something.

Your fic, doesn't have a strong begin...so I don't need you to end it big. It's your choice. It's a good read and like seen the new influences in very new chapter.

So, influences...

You need to work on body language. You don't seem to know how to use it. Now, I'm not saying that I know how to use it correctly 100%, but from what I've read of your chapter is that your little worst.

There's two things that I think one needs to learn to help them write body language: Seeing Body Language and Communicating Body Language.

Learn to see the movements people make and notice how it effects you and the people around you. In reallife, it's there but it's limited. Film is the best place to see body language of every degree (and plays. It's about good actors). TV series and shows are limited by actors they have and anime...it's drawings.

TMC (I don't know if you have it) is the best films in existence, if you ask me. AMC is has great movies too. Hell, even one or two movies on basic cable has a few good movies to study. Just go out of what you would watch and really look.

Now that you know body language, put it on paper. That's extremely hard to do, because you need to use universally body language. I think you can do it, though. You show an ability to describe thought and feeling, so describing the body should be easy.

Hey! Keep it up and aim for the golden skies...whatever that means...

Ooh... Miss Alice and Vaati teamed up? This should be interesting.

i miss zelda.

Ugh, writer's block... It torments us all!! It's evn more evil than Ganondorf... Okies, 'nuff rambling from me... Good chapter. ^^

im glad you updated

Whoa...weird...

That was a great chapter. GREAT chapter! I guess you answered my question from last time.

I thing the death scene could have been done a little more dramatic and with little less explanation, but all in all...great plot, great characters, great atmosphere!! A little too goth...but that's just me being punk.

I looked up that kanon wakeshima song...not my style. I like energy in my music, passion! This was a little depressing (via the goth). I looked up kuroi torikago as well, a little better but...it feels weak. Kanon Wakeshimia has some interesting things to her work (I like her cello in it, she's good) but it's not my thing.

Well, I guess you can tell that I don't have really comments on your chapter. It was really good, so keep it up...God, I don't even like it when people blend Zeldaverse with the real world.

i love the kingdom hearts opening at the end of chapter 3.
i busted up laughing when i saw that.