Very good !
I like how you write Mustang. It was sweet and cute :)

There needs to be a sequal to this. ^^

Cute fic :3

Hey!!
I totally love your story, but there isn't a variety of sentences, you know what I'm saying? all the sentences are structured the same and the story gets repetitive after a while. It's good! But, next time you write a story, watch your sentences!!
-LK

B-e-a-utiful, that's all I can say :-) 'tis perfect

WOW! That was really sweet, and cute. I love the pj bit

Aww!

It was so cute, amd slightly angsty. I loved it- definitely a new favorite.

SO cute! X3 -clickin on for favs- I loved this!! Please continue! Since you said this would be part of a two part story!

~FF5

great oneshot! i would have loved for you to have ended this story with a flashforward look into the future to when Ed is "old enough" and he and Roy are still together. However i greatly enjoyed reading this story. thank you for posting it.

I absolutely loved this. I usually despise reading things in first person, but this was so well written that I jsut had to read all of it! It was beautiful the way you portrayed both of their emotions. I can't even imagine how much time and effort you put into this. I couldn't find a single error. It was great to read. Good job!


~Torean

(I would add to my favorites, but the site is refusing to let me)

Wow, This was one of the best RoyXEd oneshots I've read in a while. I love the way you portrayed both Roy and Ed's feelings while still keeping them in character. I hope you will continue this