please update im in love with this story

HI Denver Girls,
I liked this alot and I liked how Seto supported Yami's emotions and saw Mokuba in his sad face. Seto is well done here but I don't like Yami being so sad.
I like the fact that Seto offered him a night and Yami accepted it.
I think Yami will enjoy a quiet moment to cry and regroup as we call it. Grief is terrible and sometime it can change you as well.
Nice job and I look forward to the next installment. Darlene.

interesting very interesting...
nice to see these two together as always lol
so sad that both have there own problems yet thinking about the others feelings very touching...
till next chapter

Hey May Rose, it's bahen from FB. . .glad to see the update on this fantastic tale.

I'm enjoying the character conflict here. With each other and within themselves. . . The conflict within Seto is the greater because he is trying to change his core and it is so hard for old habits to die.

But what I am finding of interest is the fact that Yami is more centered on self than Seto is. He is so absorbed in his own emotional hell that he doesn't even realize that Mokuba is as good as gone (surely that would have come out in the news when all this happened in the first place), nor does he even have the courage or it appears the desire to ask Seto where he is. Even though he senses something is not 'right' for a better word.

I have to admit I am curious about who the intruders are, and hopefully you don't think I'm trying to second guess you ( I do the same to Hathor and Apathy :) ) but I really think that the spirits of Mokuba and Yuugi would be the logical choice. Just because I can't see them not caring about the ones they've left behind and want to make sure they are alright, while watching these two come together and reassuring themselves that their respective 'brothers' will be alright behind them.

Of course you can be taking this story into a totally different direction and hey that's alright too. . . I'll enjoy the ride which ever way it goes.

Hope you update this soon. And please don't doubt your writing skills. . . looking forward to the next chapter :)
bahen

This is really great. The way you portray Kaiba and Yami's inner emotional desolation is fantastically depressing and you capture their character beautifully.

Yami doesn't talk much in this chapter, but I don't blame him at all...poor guy ; ; As for Seto, you wrote him quite well in this chappie n.n The "drink it!" scene will probably be stuck in my head for a while now XD You did a great job there.

Sammi, of course I enjoyed it! With your writing skills, who wouldn't? I'd bet that even people who don't like prideshipping would find it interesting...

Ahh, I don't want to get into another redundant rant about how amazing you are, but... it's true! ><

I think I might just get back into Yu-gi-oh. Can't guarantee anything, but... X3

You're really a source of inspiration, Nakama! ^^'

Keep it up! I'm at the edge of my seat, as always...

This sounds a lot like a story I'm working on. But I really like your take on this. Keep up the good work!

LE GASPETH!

Hello. I'm back--surprising, huh? Well anyway, moving on to the review:

I particularly love the last scene when the both of them were arguing. Really. It's so in-character and Seto wanting to ease a bit Yami's suffering is really sweet. I was honestly expecting Yami to be the anchor in this chapter, no matter how seriously affected he is by his aibou's death, but this change was really... okay, it wasn't unexpected because you mentioned this in one of your PMs but somehow, even with me knowing what would happen, it's still somewhat new to me. Am I making sense?

Bottom line is, you've got them mostly in-character. Now all we need to see is some action... oi, and romance, too! ::gets bonked::


And oh... why did Yami collapse?! I wanna know! Haha...

Update soon~! ::hugs::

Starlight

Hi Denver's Girls.
Nice second chapter here. I like how Seto picked up Atemu as I prefer to call him. Poor Yami in Seto's care for the now. I have a feeling that they will do alot of talking and even sharing in thier own way. I feel that this is a excellent second chapter and it is still setting up the story for more to happen.
I will look forward to it alot.
Keep up the excellent work and I hope you will be updating sooner. I wanted to write a longer review but I am being asked to leave the internet cafe because they are closing.
Bye for the now, until your next update on this fantastic Seto/Atemu fic. Darleneartist.

HI Denver's Girls.
My name is Darleneartist and I am always looking for good prideshipping stories to read. I will be adding this th my favs list and I will be waiting for any and all updates.
I really enjoyed reading this first chapter. The chapter itself is very good and wonderfully written. I enjoy a good angst story if it is well done.
I myself love to review will do so to let the author know that thier work is not in vain and that it is being enjoyed by someone. Keep up the good work and I hope your hands heal fast. I myself are in hospital recovering from a car accident so I know how you feel about your poor fingers k.
Please update when you can,Darleneartist.

seto's not as cold as he leads others to beleive XD
another lovely chappie Leechy! I really loved the part when Yami collasped (you've given me your Yami angst syndrome ;p ) It was a great idea to have Mokuba injured, now they can both grieve!
Later

They BOTH died?!? Talk about an angst fest...
Good second chapter. I don't think it's quite as strong as the first one, but that's kay. First chapters are to get a stranglehold on the audience anyway. :)
Looking forward to another chappie. Keep up the good work.

OMG! I'm crying again! Yami's last statement! OMG! It's so sad! Yet i love every word of it! Keep up the good work and I can't wait for more!

How sad, but awesome. Poor Mokuba. Anyway good job and awesome chapter. :D