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Reviews for: Heroes: Lovers & Friends
CrapPishh
2008-07-24 . chapter 1
It's rather short for a first chapter, and doesn't have much depth, plot-wise or character-wise. There's no sense of pull factor to draw my interest to subsequent chapters here.
Zethos Orenia Gale
2008-07-24 . chapter 1
Well, it's somewhat good, but I think you should write longer chapters and add more adjectives, you're leaving the looks of your characters to our minds.
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