Utterly fantastic story and the writing is amongst the best fanfiction that I've ever read. This reads like something out of the kind of film that gets nominated for academy awards.
I found your story thanks to the_new_library on LJ. It was recced by bemoan10.

You are amazing!! My favourite author!

I liked Snape a lot in this... you always seem to hit the nail on the head.

Love your writing. Love this one shot. Period.

I don't really understand what is going on... but it is really grabbed my attention - where did you come up with something like that?

Very well done--it's clear that Lily does want the status and wealth James Potter can offer her, _and_ to keep Severus as her willing slave.

Well, she got her way, didn't she?

Is this a oneshot or can we expect Lily to go to him and allow him one nice f*? Pretty please?

Well-written indeed. I applaud you. The pub setting was superb and I definitely like the idea of Snape visiting one in his neighborhood. However, I'm a bit confused. It sounds like Lily and gang sat in the booth in front of Severus, as in he was looking forward at them. If this is the case, then Severus's bench would not be connected to theirs, so why did he feel it when they sat down? Unless Severus's feet were resting on he bench in front of him, I don't see how this is possible. I could be completely misunderstanding this set up, so some less ambiguous description could help.

The one tidbit about Severus's and Lily's characters that you added that bothered me was the smoking bit. It was a usefull tool in getting them to meet in the alley, but, personally, I can never quite swallow when authors make these characters smoke. Lily seems like she never would because she's so uppity and righteous. Severus doesn't seem like he would because it's too muggle. Given his histoy, I'd imagine that he'd go out of his way to avoid muggle habits, which is one reason why I think he does avoid physical violence and relies more on magic prowess in the books.

On that note, I do actually agree with Bemoan about Severus being able to best James in hand-to-hand. Bemoan's reasonning is sound and is exactly how I feel on the matter.

So, aside from all of that and some minor grammar mishaps--it's "throes of death" not "throws of death"--I did enjoy this. It'd be interesting if you did another one-shot post the wedding along this same vein.

Very well-written, although it seems a bit physically rough for Snape, who is very non-violent in canon.

There was certainly a distinct whiff of her going out with James because he was cool and Severus wasn't, in the books.

I love this. I love the characterization of all the characters. This is how I imagine these characters. DH left so much to our imagination, and I like to believe there were more all these characters than what we saw in the books. But any way this had so many great lines: “Using my own spells against me, Potter”
“Even the Black girls know that it’s half-blood…”
“‘Do you see this prize sitting beside me?” The subtext in this here is great.

And I disagree with duj and do think Snape could overpower James in a fist fight. I think James would have learned to defend himself first with the wand. Snape being half-blood and living in a muggle neighbor hood would probably learn a more hands on approach.

I’ve said enough. But one thing I also want to point out that I liked the humor in this story. Well maybe other didn’t see it but I did. The whole sausage thing. Thanks for writing this and this is going to be one of those stories I’m going to rec.

the world needs more fics where James gets punched...

I'm not convinced canonSnape would have overpowered James so easily in a fistfight, but otherwise I could see this. It must have been satisfying to say those things to Lily, but I imagine that wore off soon and a sick hollow feeling was all that remained.

For HP stories of excellence, I recommend looking at Whitehound's recs pages (Google Whitehound fanfiction, or use the homepage link on her ffnet profile, then click on Fanfiction to reach her own fics and essays and a link to her main recs page) for recs. Anything on my Favourites lists is worth a look, but mine are heavily weighted towards Snape-fics, whereas Whitehound trawls several archives and casts a broader net.

Wow. Amazing. Obviously this has extra meaning for me, and -- wow. Just right. The hardness of his apparent emotions is perfect, but there's clearly something else going on underneath.

"Even the Black girls know that it’s half-blood, not a pure blood you want when you need a decent **."

That gave me the chills, for more than one reason!