Not bad. Luv the description on the last parts, though. Very... Descriptive.

Oh, and btw, it was explored in the canon. Sort of.
Heard of FFX-2's international version? there's 10 new scenes on the sub-game there. One of them is a follow-up to the events of Crimson Sphere 8. It's Paine's narration, though. It's on YouTube.

~ RC/ZXKLS - 31X02

Aw, poor Nooj! That's so horrible that he saw everything that happened but was unable to do anything about it. And Shuyin taunting Nooj about it was just so cruel!

At least he was able to find the strength to keep living and defeat Shuyin! ^^ But gosh, that would be kinda creepy to see or hear things that would make him wonder if Shuyin was still there. And scary, too, since it might mean that he could come back!

Glad he'll be okay, though! ^^

Oh, angst! That must've been terrible for him... to be possessed and to do all those terrible things. And he can't even repent... and he doesn't even want to blame the spirit.

I loved the mention of the crickets; it gives a very vivid image of the place. And yay that he won't let himself be controlled anymore!