I didn't even waste my time reading word for word. Even the ones with random letters thrown together.

1. Your spelling is awful, use a spell checker.

2. Grammar is in a serious need of being fixed.

3. You have no real solid plot. None that I can see, anyways. This is so confusing.

4. Capitalization is a must.

5. Puncuations. How do we know where sentences end? You need to put in periods and aposthropes.

6. Tell us what they're saying in the other languages. If you're going to use Greek or Russian, then put the whole fic in Greek or Russian. Don't move around between English and the other two languages.

Did the shift key and the full stop kill your dog or something? Capitalization lets us know when we are at the beginning of a sentence. Learn to use it, will you? There is no excuse for posting something this horrible.