This is beautifully written- gorgeous! :)

Nice story!

Great story, wonderful flow of the words... even though I'm left confused.
I didn't really understand where they were or what exactly was going on but the story was good anyway.

I love the way that you wrote that. The words flowed really well in my opinion and the metaphor/symbolism (idk if my usage of the words is correct) was really nice. Keep up the awesome writing!

Interesting. It's difficult to tell what Sasuke is really thinking, how much of it is simply taunting Naruto.