i laughed so hard asfajsdfh poor, poor renji. and ppoor, poor byakuya. XDDD

That was interesting and I liked it a lot but it doesn't feel done. Maybe you could continue this but great job on this

omg! ink? haha!

HAHAHA CANT STOP LAUGHING!

Renji... Creative thinking of excuses is not his strong point... But my ink is running? That surely hit hard in Byakuyas senses...

Oh gawd, I laughed so hard. "My ink's running.."

It was also so hot I burned too. :D

BUAHAHAHAHHAAHAHAHAHAA that was fucking hilarious! XD man, i hav a cold and i didn't wanna laugh so hard as it hurt my throat, so damn u :P

f aww adoroable I WANT TO READ THE RETS OF THIS STORY NOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT ;_;

aw aww aw aw aw

... was renji hiding his erection LOL

haha

i don't even like yaoi

but i like this story

other than the yaoi-ness, the characters are totally in character...(that makes no sense at all, does it?)

and your descriptions are great

teehee

i can totally imagine a nude byakuya lol

that was really god

sorry I'm too lazy to sign in. anyway, I read your fanfiction and really liked it. Now, I'm not begging here, but this is my opinion and something I'd like you to know. This fanfic plotline has a lot more potential for a proper series than many other fanfics I have read. Your fic seemed more like a perfect first chapter than a one-shot.

Now for my critique. Your details are wonderful, and the characters are wonderfully portrayed, especially since they're quite in character (aside from the fact that this isn't a canon pairing, but y'know I like ByaRen anyway). You don't rely on dialouge to tell the story like a lot of people, and I can't tell you how impressive that is. You have a slight problem with run-on sentences (See paragraph 4 & 13). And I think if you used a more sophisticated vocabulary, the descriptions would sound a lot better.

Yeah, I really liked this story even though it seemed unfinished. ...I just realized I haven't given a review this detailed in a really long time. Anyway, great job, I hope you actually read this whole thing.

That was hot. Awesome.

Hee, hee... XD I like this.I'm not a Renji/Byakuya fan as such, but I do like this.

nice sweet and funny. aw to bad

My ink is running? xD

That was so funny!

I think I read this before and added to my fav.

but I dont think I left a review last time...:3 Forgive me?

ANyway, this just made my day, again. Because Im pretty sure it made my day the first time I read it! xD