aw that was so sad, great story!!

Oh, really sad! I've always wanted to write a story about this one scene...very much like this one. :) Very good, I liked it a lot!

~Jordyn~

I liked this! I liked the way you conveyed her emotions and the moment in so few words. Few words, but the sentences were strong and powerful.

This was my favorite part; the one that impacted me the most:

'So she turned on her stomach and, in the final threads of denial, tried to get him to stir, to breathe, to live.

“I'll never let go, Jack.”

She kissed his hand and watched him sink, her heart falling with him.

“I'll never let go."'

It flowed like poetry. You didn't need anymore to get across the depth of the moment. In my opinion, you had a perfect balance here. A perfect one-shot. Great job!

-Rory4

Aw, sad, but pretty good! I hope you write more Fanfics eventually!

Very nice detail. Reminds me of a little one shot i wrote about this same moment

BEautiful work! This is a really well written, deeper look at one of the movie's saddest moments:) well done.