Nice to see the old gang together in a new setting. Like how you're dealing with issues of the day. Should be fun seeing how they take on those gangs.

A good beginning...continue!

Well done with some snappy dialogue between Kim, Ron and her family. The scene where they pick their team was well thought out and written. Yeah the comment about Wade was somewhat shocking but this is the 50’s after all.

Some undercurrents of emotion going on between Kim and Ron as they start working to create their task force. There's to be some issues amongst them for sure, but hopefully nothing they can't handle and work through as they take on this assignment.

As for Wade being a part of the task force then, yeah, them's the norm for the time.. sad to say. The rest of the make of the team should make for interesting times with all.

The players figured out, for the most part, now comes the initial meetings. Vince's sitch should come to light shortly with Kim.

CB73

Ahh, missed this story. Glad to have it back! Keep it up.

ok this chapter was better then the last. do her brother strom in to her room. if you are going to have a new mole have it be some one we would never expcet. update soon

That mob hit was nicely done, very tense, with just amount of fear by the owner to make it believable.

I know the policemen didn’t usually go to college before they joined the force back then so that fit in with the overall feel your were going for.

So Kim may have other ideas about her partner than just taking down the mob huh?

Annie Possible can be a very perceptive mother huh? Are the tweebs around as well or will Kim be an only child here?

My only question is how old are Kim and Ron in this universe of yours? Making detective usually means years on the street as a beat cop.

Nice work mate.

I like it. the Mafia mobs, good subject.

Heres an idea, you make a character called "Joshie the Squeeler" based on Josh Mankey and Joey the Squeeler on the simpsons.

Looking forward to the next chapter,

Panzer.

Great use of the classic mob hit on the family joint. Good Shegoism there also.

I really like how Kim and Ron graduated High School rather than college. Cops just didn't go to college at this time. And very good scene at the Possible house.

Look forward to the next chapter.

Brief snippet of one of the mob gangs at work. Drakken and Shego make a good intro to the intimidation.

Ron still Ron's along here doesn't he? But he is dedicated to his work helping protect the public as best he can.

New task force forming and a warning of what could happen if they aren't careful.

Introduced to his partner, he feels an attraction to her as they make their way to her home and parents (Mom has those two pegged huh?). Some personal moments with mom and dad, and her little friend, and it becomes evident that she is attracted to him also.

CB73

Like I said on RS Net, sounds interesting... Awesome job so far.

Excellent "trailer" -- I look forward to the story!

can you put also a lot of romance,it would be perfect.

OK you have my attention; so your movie trailer opening worked for that. The quick glances into the future, different, very different. I'll stick around and see how you take this. I’m not too big of a fan of music lyrics to open a scene. If you don't know the music in question it gets in the way.

"The scene pans up to the black sky, a sky that is soon filled with red letters depicting the title of this story as spent shell casings rain down across it, and the music fades out…"

(You really didn't need that. You’re trying to cross a visual medium {movies} with a written medium) There’s no point to it. If you want the reader to feel a certain emotion or be in a particular frame of mind you write it out.

I expect all those things, plus a little fifties music. Looking forward to seeing how you handle this.