A good chapter. Glad to see it continue.

I'm rather liking the characters. Forte is a good change for the shingami; one that wants to simply propagate chaos rather than on that just wants to be amused. I like that. Snow is a fairly interesting lead. She still seems a selfish character when compared to Light, in how she kills random people and seems to lack his desire for bettering the world and only desires to further her place in it. I'll be quite interested in seeing how she develops.

Of course, the chapter did contain a number of little mistakes that were kind of distracting. It was still readable, and quite enjoyable despite them though.

I look forward to the next chapter.

It was a long time to this chapter, but it was worth it. The new chapter corrected every misstep of the first chapter by being longer and more involved. The characters of Snow and Forte are taking more shape now, and the plot has been set into motion. I am very excited about this now. Please keep going; this is one that needs to continue.

THIS iS SO GOOD! AWesome awesome awesome beginning chapter! It was very good. Snow seems like a peculiar character and I loved to know more about her. i do hope you continue!

I was pushed in the direction of this story by Rabukurafuto, and I'll say I was fairly pleased with the beginning chapter. The writing might honestly be a little weak at parts, but the story seems decent enough. I really rather like the idea of a girl getting a hold of a Death Note (and not just being the blind follower). It's also interesting to make the lead a more selfish than idealistic character (or at least she seems that way here at the beginning). I'm eager to learn more about this shinigami, Forte.

I'l be interested to see where this goes.

I can imagine lol

Snow's quite some kid.

Hmm... Very intresting.

Not much I can say now. I like how you used soem songs form the Death Note OST in it.

I can tell this is conna be one of my more favorited stroies form oyu. Heh heh heh...

Very good. Hope to see more in the future.

It's off to a good start, although it is rather short like you told me earlier. I think it could have been longer. Forte has a good appearence. All in all I look forward to more.