Great job you made it romantic and yet very hot. You also really had Edward pegged right on.

Ack! How is it possible that I've not read this before now? I wait on your WDMC updates like the deserts wait for rain, but somehow I overlooked this.
So many writers have attempted to write that scene, but yours surpasses nearly all.
That was sincerely beautiful.
I already knew that you captured Edward's voice wonderfully, but you managed to astonish me again.
Utterly amazing.

Oh My Gosh. That was the most beautifully depicted honeymoon for Edward and Bella that I have EVER read on FanFic-and trust me-I have read ALOT of them. The dialogue was heartbreakingly accurate and sensitive. The love just GLOWED on this beautiful literary work of art. I am so glad you wrote it-and I would believe SMeyer would have found this a perfect compliment to place between her own pages...

I am going to go see your other writings now...thanks so much-REALLY!

Um, wow. I had never read this before. I LOVE What Dreams may come... this was so highly erotic. Fantastic!

of course she forgives him! xD
in truth she enjoyed it probably just as much as he did!
haha.

i've got to say, i've only just recently finish reading the whole twilight saga so this was the first twilight fanfic i've read and boy was it damn good!
HAHA.

no lie. it was seriously beyond awesome that i actually probably can't give you a proper description on how awesome it was! O:

ahh edward

Thankyou so much for writing this, it was awesome :D
As lots of people have said already, it really did fill the gap that we were left with in Breaking Dawn. I feel a little more satisfied now :P
(I think you have a real knack for writing awesome sex scenes!)

omg! i dont that i have ever read a more detailed and eluding twilight fanfic ever!
this is the BEST one that i have read so far.
perfect!

wow.
you wrote that really well. it really captured edward-in my opinion at least.

Wow. That really filled the gap for me in Breaking Dawn. I was so disappointed that the wedding night had been almost totally skipped over in the book, despite knowing full well it's a teen book and there wouldn't be anything more than what were in the previous books. But your one shot did it well and seemed like it totally fit right in between those parts in the book.

Awesome one shot!

oh, poor edward...

you seriously understand edward to a degree no one in fanfiction cyberspace can achieve. Either their too angsty, too cheerful, and the worse they usually write his thoughts in a manner befitting a teenager and not someone as intelligent, well-manner, and old fashioned. I find myself asking questions like...did they read the book at all? But your fantastic...you so have to continue...you have write something else beside these two pieces, you should definitely continue this one into the morning. also the beach story should be told in his, as well. and the others in bella's. youre seriously talented...and i am a tough critic i usually hate fanfic, because their usually so off...but just...wow! you got everything perfect...the selfloathing, his undying love and devotion as well as desire for her, (everyone always concentrate on his desire her blood, but i so feel thats a back after a certain, like different part of his brain keeps track of his vampire abilities, while the rest continues to worship and worry about bella) Well DONE!

edward can be so melodramatic sometimes. *sigh*
but i liked the story

Amazing story. I really loved this.

(one of) The problems I have with Breaking Dawn is that she just fades to black and we're left to figure out what happened the night before! This fills that gap really well!

I'm going to go read more of your stuff! Well done!

WOW! this story is fantastic! great job! ^_^

That was so beautiful! You are very well versed. When are you publishing a work of your own?

And the sex was yummy and Edward was totally in character and this was the best of the dozens of fics I've read.

I love your talent and am only slightly jealous! Thank-you.