FINALLY! GOSH!
geez, man...
oo~
aerith is gonna be **. XD
great chapter!

Finished reading the whole thing. Loved where you were going with it, but just my advice:

1. Try making friends with a person in a bad situation like Cloud's, they really don't usually act like that. They're usually a tad more protective, usually very loyal to friends/lovers and rarely take anywhere near that much self pity on themselves. << Just how my 'bad situation' friends are, I hate stereotyping so this is never always the case.

2. Try to draw away from the cursing a bit; everyone gets angry or just curses but even the ghetto high school my friend goes to it's not that bad on your average day. << My buddy there is a real bad talker, she curses a lot, but when I made her read it she thought the cursing was a bit much.

3. Some phrases and sentences were a bit strained or awkward in just over all placement. It's best when you reread your own work before publishing look at good distinguished authors and see how they work sentence structure. << My advice is avoid Charles Dickens and may be even Tolken, their writing tends to be extremely advanced and hard to compare. (But I love their works no doubt about it) Again, that’s an opinion I just like to go by. :)

4. A good, strong and over all lasting story comes by mixing elements and blending them. I understand the story was meant to be very dramatic, and I’m guessing the heart-string tuggin’ kind, however, It’s over exasperated. Toning down some of the drama, I personally believe, would make “meant-to-be-saddening-moments-turned-awkward” back on the right path.

5. Final point, do your homework! Always, before adding an element into a story, whether it is a social worker or an asylum or even a big floppy bunny, look it up! There is no shame in adding something you don’t know about if you do your homework and at least get somethings about it correct. Most people aren’t all knowing on all things and many will overlook anything they might be a bit iffy on; it lets the story flow better. When you get stuff way mixed up, people tend to say “huh? That’s not right.” And will scrutinize the work -leading to bad reviews lol.

Ok, I’m done; those are just basic little things that GREATLY improve upon any kind of literary work. If you feel motivated enough and want to do some nice tweaking, I would be more then happy to help you edit the story. :)

Just hit me up, and if need be we can get cracking and make this amazing story an unforgettable sob story ^^ (in a good way)

And folks really, you can make good critz and NOT be rude. No one likes having something they obviously spent a good deal of time on shredded apart by ya’ll via honest mistakes...everyone starts somewhere.

this is really really good!
the emo, insecure, loser type kindof fits cloud in a bit of an exagerrated form of his real character.
lol i really love that you made loz, kadaj, yazoo, and sephiroth cloud's brothers.
just adds to his problems. XD
nice job so far. can't wait to read more, so that's what im gonna do!
:)

But... and Yazoo?

I really enjoyed that chapter! Hope to read next part soon!

I'm actually readind the translating but can't wait for the next part so I decided to find the original one! ^^
Your story is really good!

Maybe you can change a little the way you present the story for exemple for the interviews because it would be, and it's just my opinion, maybe more enjoyable! (ddon't know if the right word!)

Have you ever writen the end? Hope to read it quickly! End word: good job!

waah~ but what happens to Yazoo now? and Cloud got a tad bit carried away with the whole emo thing =O, its still good =D

wah! poor cloud.. this is the first FFVII fic ive read, and its pretty good =O just a bit strange here and there, but still its awesome <3!

ok. now that i fully read this chapter, i feel totally disgusted and ** at vincent valentine. seriously. he gave up on yazoo. wtf is that?? my gosh. he's a weirdo. yazoo needs to escape that mental institution, where they do horrible stuff to him, and vincent just left him there. thats messed up. im so friggin angry now.

o.O is it finished now?? wtf happens to yazoo??
this is making me crazy. if he ends up stuck in a mental asylum forever, then i will totally manhandle you...lol. i hope that this fanfic is not over.

aw, man. im writing this review while i read, and all i have to say is that tifa got pwned. this is what i meant when i said i love yazoo. tifa deserved it.

ah...chapter 3 is such a delight. i love ur writing. so suspenseful. im in the process of reading this right now, so i dont know if this is finished or not, but, well see. hopefully, u update regularly. haha

sephiroths a ** in this fanfic. urgh...i hate him...well, hopefully,he'll wake up and see whats happening to cloud, i mean, seriously. people are beating up on him, and sephiroth doesnt even care. such a mean brother. ahah. i love yazoo in this one. he's the best. i love how he cries in the movie. and kadaj and loz are all like, "come AWN, man." haha. he's so awesome. yay, for helping cloud out a bit! at least he's the one who's acting like a sort-of brother.

YAY!! I'm happy and feel loved Haha. I really loved this chapter and proof reading it was really fun!! You need any help proof reading again just ask XD.
DoublleL xx

Ok. Ok ok ok. First 10 chapies were simply making me nuts. I mean, you made Cloud even more emo that he is in AC. I seriously thought that wasn't possible X) somehow i just couldn't get into character like i usually do. However i grew to love Yazoo very much. I cried my eyes out for the next few chapies after he was taken away. So when you wrote in the end of last chapter that this is the end, i could only thought bout what's gonna happen to him.
So i'm really glad that you continued with this story. Also, last chapie made me lmao X) can't wait for them to sober up XD hehe

Keep up the good work and update soon ^^

Wow! I was glad to see it as a new chapter, that was awesome, heh, Seph sure is clumsy as hell, damn him XD

I can't wait to see the events at home O_O !! Cloud, Kadaj and Loz, I MISSED THOSE DUMBA$$E$!! And I'm looking forward to see Yazoo back! That guy was a legend in this story!! I want him back so BAD!!