Excellent story. You have captured Krillin and 18 perfectly, and the sexual tension between them is well written; it leads up to chapter four perfectly. And you did a good job with the lemoney aspects too. It was more than sex that you wrote about, and it was necissary. So many people dodge that aspect of Krillin and 18's relationship (or write it like dirty word **), when actually it is a natural step in a relationship. Anyway, good job.

However, your illustration link doesn't work, and I'm interested in seeing your view of this story in another medium. If you could just reply with the correct link that would be great.

Also, I would be honored if you read some of my work...I'm a Krillin and 18 fan and I have a few fics (mostly oneshots and poems, but one big story).

If you don't have time or don't want to, I completly understand.

Great job once again.

--Ainmosni--

Awsome story i loved it :)

how verry nice! god i love it! more more more!

chapter 4 was hot ^_^

An incredible story! You are clearly talented. I thought you portrayed Krillin and Eighteen's characters impeccably. Aside from a few typos, I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Very good.

The whole fic was good. I liked how 17 act's throughout the fic and in the wedding scene. Very good.-Lip aka Josh aka Kril

Great fic. Hope there will b a sequel.

I like this, especially what you did with the Z Warriors and all. If this were in Pojo's Unofficial, I'd give it 7 stars (Pojo ranks by Dragon Balls).

Nevermind about were i could find your story.
I found it -_-() Love it!

I think you did an awsome job with this story. It would make sense if this story actually did happen. Tell me if you have any other stories, reguardless of what topic they are.

Hey great fic I checked out the pics and they are awesome! where in the world did you lean to draw like that?

This was so cool! I've never been much of an Eighteen fan but this story was awesome!!

Great story. I even went over and saw the illistrations to the story. They were awsome!!!!! It's really cool when someone does something like that. Hopefully I'll see more of you illistrated works in the future.

i have to admit, this is really great! I even re-read it on the other page w/ pics. Nice drawings and great emphasise!! keep up the good work!!

Great story