Cool chapter
Please Continue soon

NExt please ^_^ i like how the story goes i hope they sleep together ^_^ that would be sweet

Please update this story. It's an AWESOME story :)

It's nearly half a year since last updating, but I'll keep on waiting for your back to NanoFate and this story lol

Hey..
I noticed you aren't updating this fanfic.. that's really sad though T.T I'd love to read more about this story, it's really awesome!! it doesn't matter if it's a short chapter.. as long as there are some NanoFate hints ;P good luck with all of your fics.. I really love 'em ^^ I actually never review, but I DO read all of your NanoFate fics :D I really love them all ^^
Gokigenyou!!

I loved this.

The cool and aloof Fate and the cutely clumsy Nanoha.

Any chance we see an update of this?

Good luck with the writing
Reader458

Kawaii!

I'm not normally a fan of High School! Nanoha fanfics but this one was just adorable!

Especially the brownies! Fate REALLY acted her age *Snicker*

Post more! This is too funny to let die!

Regards
SA

Nice story. Update sometime soon please.

Update asap okay..don't make us readers dissappointed.
I really want to know the next chapter. I hope it will be longer.

The part with the brownies was comical and adorable. Very creative. I look forward to the next chapter when you're able to.

There were some dialogue lines that needed quotation marks at the end.

Corrections:

“Actually, ‘cute little puppy’ would hardly be the words I’d chose to describe Arf.” choose.

"Considering the exited way Arf wagged her (giant) tail and licked Fate’s face, Nanoha could tell that they were very close." excited.

"Nanoha blinked, before realized what Fate had said, and she burst out into laughter again." realizing.

That's so adorable. I like where you're going with this story. Your writing style is poetic to me.

Corrections:

"A rather subdued Nanoha made her way pass laughing students, not really looking at where she was going." past.

This is beautiful and well written. Very captivating imagery and good character interaction. This is going straight to my faves.

This is actually really interesting. You're creative. :D

Corrections:

"She hated to cause her friends unnecessary worry." friend's.

"She got a better look at the taller girl, now that she was actually a decent distance away and not clinging on to her like demented schoolgirl." I believe "a" should be between like and demented.

A very good start. I like the imagery, word choice, sentence structure, and character interaction. Definitely reading the rest.

Corrections:

“I’m really in to designing outfits for people.” Correct me if I'm wrong, but I think it's into.

“You-" Quotation mark at the end.

Continue please...
It's very good.