 StealthLiberal 2009-06-01 . chapter 3I'm very glad to see that you are continuing this story. There are too few fanfics out there for Alien Nation. Anyway, I do enjoy the fact that you are using how humans in relationships with Tenctonese would be targets in their own right for the Purists. Something about being "race traitors" I think was how they put it in one of the movies.
Having said that, the flow was a bit jumpy, you have some very good segments here, but you seem to have a bit of trouble tying them together. Keep plugging onthis story and it will come to you, or you could use the services of a beta reader. Otherwise, I'm looking forward to reading more. |