nice smut. and it's a pretty good story too. hope you keep it up.

I do hope that you don't let your lack of reviewers get you down. I for one found this story utterly fascinating. At the start I was a little put off but decided to continue reading it. I'm incredibly glad that I did. You've created such a intriguing alternate Narnia that has such dimension and creativity in it. The characters you've created to go along with this world are wonderfully beautiful and tragic. I thank you for this story immensely.

I just wanted to tell you that this story is by FAR the most intriguing and interesting piece of writing I have EVER read! I absolutely love your style of writing and your "voice." I love your use of character development as well. At first I couldn’t even imagine Susan and Caspian tolerating each other, let alone falling in love with each other. But eventually through many interesting scenarios you made the impossible possible! And to be quite honest, I’m pretty sure I like your Susan better than the original! She’s is much more spunky, outspoken and doesn’t take crap from anybody but she's got that childish side that just wants to let go and not worry about anything. She seems more REAL and relatable than other versions of her I’ve read about. Your Caspian is also quite intriguing. He’s is definitely much more dark and alluring than other versions as well. But I think you've created a really great challenge for yourself! Because he is so dark and set in his ways it gives him an edge that none of your other characters have. And to be able to keep that edge about him a constant throughout your writings despite his inner turmoil is truly astounding! Even some professional authors start out with this dynamic character but when you throw love in the mix it's like the character suddenly turns to mush and they're all soft and gooey and I’m left thinking "WTF?!" The character completely loses themselves to the “salvation” of love and they’re all about bunnies and roses! It’s so disappointing when characters end up like that; it’s just not real. But your ability to have your characters go through SO much and have them stay somewhat unchanged but not losing that edge about them, it really is extraordinary and so refreshing! I truly commend and applaud you for ALL your hard work and I SO SO SO appreciate all the time and effort you put into your writings! I can’t wait for your next update and I hope you do it soon 'cause I’m pretty sure I’ll cry myself to sleep everyday till you do ;) thank you thank you thank you for this amazing story and I LOVE it!! Thnx so much!

Hi! I just wanted to let you know how much I love this story, and I really hope you continue it soon.

This is so good, I hope you haven't given up on it! I'm really looking forward to more.

when are you going to update again?

Hrm. I only just found this story last night (and have already read through all of it, haha) and was kind of disconcerted to see that there had been some sort of hubbub about a silent readership. Not to be ungrateful, because I know you are doing this for yourself and because it's fun, especially if you also have some sort of professional career going on, but I would imagine that having all those hits in and of itself would be a huge compliment. I do really enjoy your story, but many times upon reading a chapter (of anything, mind you, not just this) I don't feel like I could leave a review more eloquent than 'That was wonderful, and I patiently await the next update!' which seems sort of like a waste to me. I really hope I'm not offending you or anything, but I feel like you should know that just because someone doesn't leave a review doesn't mean that they're not finding joy in what you're writing. I feel like having my IP address is enough to let you know that I'm reading and enjoying without posting 'Great chapter! I look forward to the next.' I generally reserve comments for when I feel I have something constructive or heartfelt to say, and most of the time I don't have any words like that. I'm glad to see that you've continued posting, because I do genuinely enjoy this story. Both my parents are published authors, and my mom actaully has fic posted here and she's always pleased just to see the numbers go up, although reviews are better, and moreso if they are more than just a quick note. Perhaps my experience is misleading me, but it seems to me that you're undervaluing the readership by going strictly on comments and not on the hundreds of people that are clearly reading your stories.
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I'm only on Chapter 3, but I had to stop and review! I really like what you're doing with your story. I've read stories in the past where a character is abducted/captured by another, is dominated/raped, and then the two characters eventually fall in love, the abducted character's "innocence" eventually overcoming the other character's warrior/brutishness. I never found those stories convincing because I don't think a character that can only offer innocence/extraordinary beauty would hold long-term interest for the other character (who is inevitably in a position of high power). In your story, Susan is certainly innocent in many ways. But she is quick to grow up, she's intelligent, and she sees Caspian for what he is, both for his potential for good and the reasons for his weakness. While Caspian holds the "actual" power, Susan is very much capable of questioning and maneuvering from her place.

In any case, you've created a story with two very real characters. Your story reminds me of the relationship between Stanley and Stella in A Streetcar Named Desire. At first glance, the relationship would appear to be abusive, with Stanly clearly being the character is charge. But to write off their relationship that way would be taking the easy way out. Same with your story.

My point is, I find both Susan and Caspian interesting, but Susan interesting in particular. It's not often I get to read a story about a character in Susan's position who questions her place but is quick to learn and adapt, choose her fights, and finds a purpose for herself in the greater scheme of things (wanting and being capable of helping out in the war). Susan's strong, and I'm excited to see what she'll do next. Great job! :)

When I first started this story, I have to admit that I was rather disturbed and I wasn't sure that I could continue reading. But I listened to you, gave it a chance, and have ended up loving it!! I am a huge fan of this pairing, and this is definitely not the garden-variety Suspian. I applaud you for your unbelievable talent and I very eagerly await another post!

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This is really on of my fav. storys just love it :)

Loved Luis mocking Peredur (and Caspian). Read through over two days, and while totally not my idea of Susan and Caspian, very interesting tale. Would probably work very well as a non-CoN piece with minor fudging and bear only some resemblance, since the bulk is based on characterization so far removed from canon.

I find smut fun, but I admit that I've glossed over the more sexy passages, because, well, they're violent. No, not violent... Aggressive. Consistently aggressive. Though my preference tends to be mushy fluffy romance with a dash of angst (btw, 'I Love' seems to need some attention!... 'I Wish' as well, for that matter.), I understand that it's the bulk of Caspian's character to be all demanding and gruff, but still, I suppose I find it predictable.

In any case, I await the next installment (of any fic) with anticipation!

Is this supposed to be a Stockholm syndrome story? If so, then it isn't an accurate portrayal of it. A good writer knows how to make her story logical and believable, but Susan's behavior and feelings aren't either. But I guess she is just "stupid and blind" huh? So, do the Narnian centaurs also support rape as a society, because Rosetta's reasoning confused me as well, considering it is implied that she was captured and raped as a teenager as well, she is disturbingly unsympathetic. Advice- Make Rosetta reasonabely sympathetic and horrified at Susan's treatment, make Susan show signs of the depression and trauma she should be feeling as a 17 year old rape victim, and make Caspian less of a sociopath/psychopath, because right now he has the personality of a serial killer. It needs to atleast be believable fiction!

I actually used to see Caspian in a very Prince Charming light but you have changed all that! It makes so much sense for Caspian to be, oh, what's that word? Hm, Telmarine! He's becoming much more complex as he struggles for his throne. Y'know, this probably isn't very PC but Susan almost seems to let the power,that she doesn't even want, go to her head. It's a very modern take on feminism, an automatic expectation of equality that really did take time, that Su doesn't seem to be factoring in. Love the story, hope to see more.

great chapter! update soon!

Excellent story...am thoroughly enjoying it!

And you have wonderful writing skills. Refreshing!