Should be sleeping, but I HAD to read on. Here's hoping that this will make for EXCELLENT dreams. ;)
I should have reviewed Bella's chapter first, but I was too anxious to continue. But I thought you captured the ecstasy and the agony perfectly. I wanted to cry with her.
I LOVE your flowery language. It suits Edward to perfection. I especially loved the lines: "endless litany of ardor" and the entire paragraph that followed, but especially "torn from my lips in a cry of benediction, of fulfillment."
A-mazing.

Awesome!

This was excellent. I am truly a fan of yours! You capture the essence of Edward and Bella so well. This was erotic, sensual, and tender. So very romantic!

oh. that was seriously good!
another one shot from you that answered unanswered questions while reading the books.
HAHAHA! (:

you know, just an idea you can ignore but what would be cool is as the maybe 'final' end to this two oneshot/twoshots you wrote you write about their first time as a vampire couple.

hm.
sorry my mind is in overdrive right now.
awesome story yet again!
x

Loved it!! You write even more beautifully from Edward's perspective. God that was hot.
Keep up the good work :)

Skillfully handled, truly great work.

oh. my. god. that was AWESOME!! my mouth was open for so long gaping at the words and i was so involved in the story i didn't even notice until the end, and my mouth was like so dry lol:]

Wow. You are an amazing author, not just for a Twilight FanFic, but I think you are a talented author all-around. You captured Bella's dream and Edward's tortured soul perfectly. I love it. Well done.

Kindly please also write their first time together in the cottage after Bella was transformed.Thanks

Ellie,you write so well.If this is not fanfiction, i would think this is part of Twilight.You can make a novel in the future girl.You are amazing.Let me know if you already have a book to be published.:)

Wow. This was amazingly well written, and you have Edward and Bella's characters down perfectly. It fits perfectly with the book too, it's definately going on my favourites list. Well done. =)

wonderful

wow this was great!

Again I am impressed with your style and your ability to capture Edward! Great chapter! Passion and love, it's just wonderful. Keep up the amazing work!

GAH! You are a GOD! You captured everything, the characters, the tone, even Stephenie's style. WOW! That was so tasteful and unbelievably... AMAZING!

UGH! You should write more!