this is a really great piece of writing!! i am surprised at how well you can portray edward's character- not many people can write his thoughts as well as you can.
very good oneshot. :)
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Fantastic. The best reason I've seen so far as to why Edward bit the pillow. Bravo. Very well done.

Wow you're really good at writing :)
I bet he would have thought exactly that!

I Can tell you that I love your writting, this was the first one I read, but just so you know I suscribed to FanFiction 'cause of this story!! Lovely, helped with my obssesion with Edward !! !!

wow that is really good...i could imagine thats how edward actually kinda felt ...you're really good at writing keep upthe great work :D

Good chapter... i liked it. It was good to get an idea of what someone thought edward felt during that whole thing.

This was beautiful. Not only did you get inside Edward's head and fully understand the workings of his mind and that deep self-hatred thing Edward's got going on, you wrote it beautifully. This is amazing, you're an excellent writer.

just...wow...i think steph would like this.

wow... i really liked it. very deep and very, very edward haha

That must have been a horrible night for Edward. Having to watch, the results of their intimacy appear on her skin. The ultimate buzzkill. Great job capturing those thoughts, great short story.

Wow. This was good. Really good. Really really good. Like wow. I'm really really impressed - this was amazing!! You've totally captured Edward, and his self-hatred and self-doubt, I love it!!

Wow! That was GREAT!

This was FANTASTIC! I'm really excited for all the fanfic that will be popping up as a result of Breaking Dawn's release. I really loved it, despite the horrible reviews it's getting from fans. Have a great one. Thanks for posting!

That was beautiful. exactly as i imagined it :) good job

I think you captured the turmoil that resides in our favorite vapire perfectly. Thanks for sharing!