I think its a very nice story 3

Wonderful, beatiful, cute, lovely.
There were some mistakes in the spelling, but otherwise very sweet fic :3

ps. Sorry for the bad english

i DoNt KnOw WhY YoU SaId It IsNt GoOd, I tHoUgHt It wAs PrEtTy GoOd

Well...uhm this is embarassing. A nosebleed. A spontaneous nosebleed. I am surrounded by a flood of tissues trying to hide the fact that your story has given me a nosebleed. Greeeatt...

Like you, I am obsessive towards the LucasNess pairing. There is probably not one picture or story out there about these two that I haven't seen. And, I'll admit, there's only a handful that has made my nosebleed. Really. It's an achievement...my nose...bleeding...

That sounds odd, doesn't it?

Anyways, great sexual play, love the way you describe the touches, and the sounds and the sight...

As if I was there!

Ooooohhhhh...what I wouldn't do to be there when...

*spontaneous nosebleed*

i love it you may not be the first but your one of the best to me this was awesome the ONLY thing could have made this better is if they were seen together but that would have been funny and you were going for romantic and trust me you got it.

How is this a crack pairing? It's pretty close in brawl, it's be very crackish in mother sense though.

This is a really awesome story, it makes me feel like there's another chapter, but there isn't...so I get sad. But it's alright! Because I enjoyed it :D So I will treasure it.

it's really sexy, to tell you the least. And... Ness is pretty dirty in this one. It's good. NO, great!

NOBODEH TAKES MAH MAN BUT ME!

(that would be lucas.)

p. you're gonna make an M rated story, make it descriptive, and let them know what they're doing and make sure to describe everything they're doing and using during the dreaded S** word.

This was really nice and hot. Please draw a picture for it, your art is awesome! And please write more NessLucas fanfiction, you are an awesome writer! I'm begging you! But all the same, it's the best fanfiction of these two that I have ever read.

Beautiful, just utterly beautiful. You really did a great job here :)

Ah yes, the other M-rated fic. I was going to report that loser but I was too late, they took it down.

*sweatdrops* yeah, the person who put up the first NxL m-rated fic was...me, unfortunately. Sorry i took it down :( But it wasn't because of the flame. The real reason...well...i'd rather not talk about it. But you better believe that person was a loser...

Anyway, i really liked your fic, and, congrats! you took my place for the only NxL mrated fic on that section. Personally, i think you deserve the reward than i do, but this isn't about me. No no no. This is about you. I'm looking forward to your future fics.

ZM

Wow, I think this was a very sweet and compelling fic. Yeah, the beginning seemed a little rushed, and there were a few grammar errors, but it did next to nothing to sully such an adorable couple. BTW, the perosn who put up the first M-rated NxL fic? I think they took it down because some loser totally flamed them for it. Oh, well. If you ever decide to write more of this couple, I am behind you 100 percent.

Love the Chicken!

c. Miasma