uve got talent!
i actually felt like reading stephenie as i read through this!
way to go!
it was just awesome!!11

I loved this, you used the same exact tone Stephenie Meyer uses in her books. I could picture the entire thing. You have completed the fourth book for me. Thank you!!

well it's 07:46 am and well... how i feel right now would shame my family lol The peice is delicately written but with the adult content i craved from the book. You kept the style and grace of Ms Meyer but took the story to that other place every fully grown women read between the lines and imagined. Thank you.
Samantha. (who now has to try and go to work)

I found this story on the thread. I so could see this as having happened in Breaking Dawn.

Great, GREAT one shot! I loved it! I love Edward/Bella. I loved reading about their wedding night, you wrote it so beautifully, tenderly, tastefully and so filled with love. It was sensual, emotional, sexy and just perfect!

Keep up the great work! Wonderful!

wow
im really shocked
if all ur other stories r like this, im reading them
what struck me as ur best strength is ur flow,it had no dis-jointed parts in the piece
amazing
keep writing
miska de cat

heey nightdancers, I' from mexico and I found this story through the internet and i absolutly love it, it's perfect this and the others are the missing pieces to the book, the chapters we all wanted to read. I was thinking, and if you allowed, that i could translated into spanish, so people that doesn't know english can also enjoy this perfect passage. please let me know, your answer, hope you're well.. thanks xoxo

the only thing I didn't like was how he held her arms, that was uncharacteristc of Edward. Otherwise, believable and HOT. Thanks for the great read.

The story was amazing, it felt like i was there and it also felt like i was bella. Perfect descriptions of all things, especially the swimming and the bed scene. I praise you on your story, if it was out of 10 i personally would give you a 10!

I love this!! It's the best, it should have been in the book it's so good!!

This is incredible! I love how you kept it so, so close to the story. How Edward ending up bruising her, the pillow, etc. etc. It's absolutely perfect and I feel that if Stephenie had to write this scene it would be exactly like this. I can't tell you enough how much I loved this piece!

WHY WASN'T THIS IN THE BOOK?! This was wonderful..! gawsh

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STANDING OVATION!
This is *kisses fingers* ABSOLUTE BRILLIANCE!
I am a very proud author myself, and shift through pages and pages of misspelled and horribly punctuated stories every day of almost every genre, and I have to uncharacteristically pause and give you the unbelievable kudos you deserve. I cannot recount the number of 'Twilight' fanfics I have read..But I must say I am beside myself with this gorgeous work of art you have presented to an adoring public. I shall encourage evey fledgling writer I catechize to review your writing and take austere notes.

Thank you so much, and with complete sincerity,
Amber Reece

:WARNING ...SPOILER HERE !


I thouroughly enjoyed it ... however ... and this is a nit ... but what would you expect from a fan of this great saga ... no way at this stage does Bella say "... the shore still visible even to my weak human eyes..."

She did not have the perspective to know this until she was a new born.

Thank you so much for giving me a very tasteful touch on what went on with Edward and Bella first night together as one. For me, it made the whole book just a bit more delightful and sent many images through my mind.

Thanks again.