that was amaing. i cannot believe u wrote this. im sorry, but this was better than the chapter in bd.

Amazing. It's first story that realy match to book.

that was amazing.. very descriptive. lol. but really good. you did a wonderful job writing it! i wish you the greatest career in writing, you would be awesome! :D thanks for sharing (: love you hun!

Best story ever!

Amazing story, beautifully written. I wish it had been in Breaking Dawn!

uve got talent!
i actually felt like reading stephenie as i read through this!
way to go!
it was just awesome!!11

I loved this, you used the same exact tone Stephenie Meyer uses in her books. I could picture the entire thing. You have completed the fourth book for me. Thank you!!

well it's 07:46 am and well... how i feel right now would shame my family lol The peice is delicately written but with the adult content i craved from the book. You kept the style and grace of Ms Meyer but took the story to that other place every fully grown women read between the lines and imagined. Thank you.
Samantha. (who now has to try and go to work)

I found this story on the thread. I so could see this as having happened in Breaking Dawn.

Great, GREAT one shot! I loved it! I love Edward/Bella. I loved reading about their wedding night, you wrote it so beautifully, tenderly, tastefully and so filled with love. It was sensual, emotional, sexy and just perfect!

Keep up the great work! Wonderful!

wow
im really shocked
if all ur other stories r like this, im reading them
what struck me as ur best strength is ur flow,it had no dis-jointed parts in the piece
amazing
keep writing
miska de cat

heey nightdancers, I' from mexico and I found this story through the internet and i absolutly love it, it's perfect this and the others are the missing pieces to the book, the chapters we all wanted to read. I was thinking, and if you allowed, that i could translated into spanish, so people that doesn't know english can also enjoy this perfect passage. please let me know, your answer, hope you're well.. thanks xoxo

the only thing I didn't like was how he held her arms, that was uncharacteristc of Edward. Otherwise, believable and HOT. Thanks for the great read.

The story was amazing, it felt like i was there and it also felt like i was bella. Perfect descriptions of all things, especially the swimming and the bed scene. I praise you on your story, if it was out of 10 i personally would give you a 10!

I love this!! It's the best, it should have been in the book it's so good!!