 4everhis91 2009-11-01 . chapter 1loved it ... what a sweet sweet look at family time :) |
 baynewen 2009-10-30 . chapter 1Other than the fact I can't stand Jake this was a very touching story!! Edward is my favourite character and to see him in the role of father is very touching and I think you did a superb job of it.
I have always been disappointed to see Nessie neglect by fan fiction writers or only picking up her story after she has matured or is about to to begin a relationship with Jacob. So little is written about her relationship within the Cullen family as she grew and matured. Thanks for this small insight! |
 ColdComfort4 2009-10-28 . chapter 1Wow. I've read and reread this story I don't know how many times and I just noticed something. I always assumed that this took place sometime after Alice's vision about the Volturi but before they actually arrive. In that case, Jasper wouldn't be around to help Bella train. I can't believe I missed that!
I hope that doesn't come off as a criticism, because this is one of my favorites of your stories (even though I love them all!). There is not nearly enough father-daughter bonding time in the book, and only a couple snippets of Jake-Nessie time. You should write more Jake POV in the future. Great job. |
 myoung228 2009-09-24 . chapter 1Love the father-daughter bonding. It's great. |
 Joselyn Gac 2009-09-10 . chapter 1love it |
 Twilighter1781 2009-09-10 . chapter 1ahh, that was so sweet-I half expected Nessie to play the piano in Breaking Dawn somewhere. |
 Bitter Sea Light 2009-08-28 . chapter 1This was a great story. :) The technical part was perfect and the plot was amazing - enough humour and perfect amount of fluff. :) It looked like something Stephenie Meyer would've written. ;) The story was exactly something she could've written. :) Simply perfect! ^^
All the best,
Maria :) |
 lisa89 2009-08-20 . chapter 1This is wonderful, and your characterizations are spot on! Perfect. :) |
 TeamMidnightSun 2009-08-10 . chapter 1aw i miss renesmee. I think i will read Breaking Dawn again. Its in my bag. Anyway I loved this. it really showe how Jacob feels; not completely but good. I liked the vocabulary; it wasnt old fashion like edwards. true to jacobs character. that was great. but the bond between edward and nessie was just so amazing. i want to cry it was so beautiful. i did hope bella would come into the scene but it was great all the same. I am proud of jacob even though it wasnt his fauly hes so tolerant. its the imprinting. but its all good. anyway i loved it. your amazing; as if i couldnt say it enough. |
 delete147 2009-07-21 . chapter 1Very sweet, I was missing some Edward/Daddy moments in the book, great idea! |
 reesessweetie 2009-07-20 . chapter 1this one-shot is so cute! i love it! the piano lesson with edward and jacob's thoughts were fun to read. very heartwarming. thank you for doing such a fantastic job with it. and i'm glad you included the jacob/rosalie feud. they always make me laugh |
 sylvernight 2009-07-12 . chapter 1I think you have a real gift for capturing the flavor of SM's stories. This seemed like it could have fit easily into Breaking Dawn, and was very cute. I especially like Rosalie's response at the end. |
 brunettelamb 2009-07-11 . chapter 1hhahahah "go back to your face Barbie"
=) love it |
 janispsnipes 2009-07-11 . chapter 1What a warm & fuzzy story... Really enjoyed it. :D |
 Noble Korhedron 2009-07-07 . chapter 1A LEASH?! WOAH, Rose sure knows how to put a bratty werewolf in his plaice!?! Heh, heh! Perhaps expand this into a series of one-shots of Nessie's early years(1-3 or 4)?! If you do, make sure you cover before AND after the Volturi incident. B+. |