|Reviews for The Last Master|
| NewtypeJuliet 8/22/08 . chapter 4
Drama, suspence, and comedy all in one story, what more could a person ask for? Seriously, I love how this is turning out. I have had the chance of seeing the ideas for this story morph into the exciting story it's becoming. I don't know much about Pokemon, but the characters you have created makes it a story anyone, even those with minimal knowledge of Pokemon, able to read and connect with it. I love how u give me cliffhangers, like Leo's nightmares of losing Selena, to the jokes shared between Leo, Conner, and Murph. You given me so much to look forward to. So job damn well done and keep coming with those chapters because I can't wait to see what will happen next.
| XAOTL Omega 8/16/08 . chapter 4
Well a nice story here so far. With brilliant written quality, and a load of OC's.
and the idea of Co-ordinators having the 'high life' caries on in this story from the show, so good continuity there. I'm getting a bit more familiar with the characters, altough am having a hard time remembering the names of all but Leo, who to me seemes a tad Mary Sueish.
With the many talents, the name, the perfection in what he does (no matter what it is), a tragic past, the seemingly Amazing Pokemon, the ability to kill without remorse yet becoming kind when the time comes up, the fact that he was a very young ranger.
Team Galactic are going to be a problem tough. and It will be interesting to see how Ash and co will tie into all of this.
but to round this review off written quality and flow are great. I'd just like to see imperfections in Leos character, to compensate for his perfection and ability to stand out in just about everything.
and now I vanish...
| Rave The Rich 8/16/08 . chapter 4
Great chapter, man! I have to say that I am even more interested in this than I ever thought I could be. The story of Yukinari and Leo knowing each other from a while back is intriguing and the prospect of them belonging to a team together and keeping a vault with weapons in it in case he needs the team to come back together without a hitch. I will be keeping tabs on this relationship very closely, and I'll also be watching for the reason why Yuki got flustered when he heard that Drew was on the St. Ives or part of Satoshi's circle of friends. The whole scene with Kenji and Yuki was funny and made me wonder what would happen next.
Also, the VIPs of the St. Ives certainly do have 'the life', don't they? I knew that Haruka would finish her fifth plate of food. That girl would put Joey Chestnut and Takeru Kobayashi to shame with her eating abilities. Nice putting Saori's jealousy there with Harley and Shu's bet.
Leo's abilities seem to shine when needed the most, and he'll need it and the team to fend of the five members of Galactic on the St. Ives. Hopefully, Reiko, or should I say Vanessa, will provide proper assistance along with the top four coordinators in Johto and some trainers, as well.
I'm putting this on alerts now, as I see no problems with dialogue or much else! Great job, and keep the updates coming!
| Rave The Rich 8/10/08 . chapter 3
Well, Newtype, you already know how I feel about your story. I am loving it and I am very much into it, and that's why it is listed as one of my favorites.
I think it has to do with the combination of intriguing original characters like Leo, Reiko, Emily, Commander Watson and others juxtaposed with a nicely fleshed out version of Hinata, a more battle tested and Haruka who still keeps that happy attitude about her that I love and a very well-rounded and book savvy Masato.
Things seem to be coming together well. I eagerly await the next chapter!
| sheepeater 8/10/08 . chapter 3
Wow, this is a really good story. I love all the details and how it just seems to flow. Update soon.