haha... I love this story!

I hope you're going to continue with it. 8)

A few of my favorite parts

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Leo frowned in slight anger at his own faulty memory. Then he shrugged. At least he had not had to do a three-thousand word essay AND fifty flips as Raphael had had to do-- HIS answer had been “Simple-- kill one, then force the other to enter the door first. End of story”.

Secretly, Leo still thought Raph’s answer was more in line with a true ninja, but then who was he to argue with the Way Things Were?

Mike’s had been “Why was I trapped in the room in the first place? Was I grounded? Is this about that mess in the bathroom the other day? If there was only two doors, how did I get in there? Wouldn’t I go out the door I came in? Were there any windows? What about time portals? Were there any time portals in there? How about transporters like in Star Trek? Did Scotty beam me in there? What if I don’t go into any rooms unless Don is with me? Are you sure I’m not grounded, ‘cause if I’m grounded, wouldn’t I get into more trouble if I try to leave the room before you ungrounded me? Can I have some ice cream, I’m hungry!”

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“Why would Splinter be teaching Mike anything new?” Don had replied bitterly, cleaning up (yet again) after Mike’s attempt to “help” with Don’s latest invention. “Unless it’s lessons in how to screw with my projects in even more unimaginably destructive ways than usual.”

Leo had looked in Shock and Brotherly Disapproval at Donatello.

“You know, you sounded just like Raphael when you spoke like that,” he had sternly chided him.

Don had brightened visibly.

“Did I? Neat!”

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Anyway, I'm glad you haven't forgotten about this story. Yes, I know, writer's block and all that...totally understand. I have that with (cough) one of mine right now, and maybe another one, if you count my YD re-write. Still stuck on chapter one.

Anyway, I'm enjoying this very much and for all of the reasons that I've stated in previous reviews.

Looking foward to the next chapter! :0)

Man, I seriously love this story. I always like how you put the "(Future) Leader" thing. It always makes me smile.

Please update soon!

Whoo Hoo! Another update! I loved this chapter, Cyn. I can see Leo wanting to master this kata to show Mikey up. And it's a good thing Mikey didn't see what Leo had in his mouth. That was a close one! Nicely done as usual, and I'll be eagerly awaiting an update.

The Bubbly One,
Shell

Oh-hoh! And the plot thickens-- much like a soup to which corn starch has been added.* :-D I LOVED Secret Agent Mikey. So awesome! That was one of my favorite scenes. And Leonardo is so paranoid and perfect.

I read this chapter in college during a class break today and saved it and read it again when I got home because it was so awesome.

*Steven Brust quote from the "Pheonix Guards." Couldn't help it, it was particularly applicable.

This chapter was great, Cyn. I really enjoyed it. Nice job. Now Leo's really gonna be curious about that Notebook, especially since he saw that paragraph. Can't wait for an update.

The Bubbly One,
Shell

I adore this story so much! As soon as I start reading I have this massive grin on my face that doesn't leave until the whole chapter is finished.
The little touches are so brilliantly hilarious, like everything being the something or other 'of Solitude' and Mike taking 'Care of Business'.
And of course the characterisation is spot on.

I just love the extra stuff you put in your stories, the little background intel that has nothing to do with the story itself, such as - Leo, from his dusty hiding place, watched as Mike took the toy handcuffs that had been Raph’s (ah-HA! I KNEW it was Mike who took them! Well, Raph shouldn’t have kept chaining Mike to the bunk bed, but really, that’s no excuse to steal from your brothers . . .) The part between brackets had me chuckling. LOL But, yes, that way you write, it makes for fun reading. And it's the way kids think, too.

The fact that you repeatedly describe Leo's hiding place as 'dusty', hints that something's going to happen, triggered by the dust. ACHOO? Hm. . .let's continue reading and see. . .

I have a feeling that this scene will be Leo's eventually undoing - (remnants of a once beautiful wall mosaic-- Leo’s eye was briefly distracted by a particularly brilliant and intact square of blue-- into one of his many pockets it went) - if only because it will prove to whomever discovers it with him - Splinter? - that he did not go in the direction he had planned to go.

This was - brilliantly hilarious - - - Roll... slitherslitherslitherslither... freeze... crawlcrawlcrawl... ouch... freeze... rollrollroll... ouchouch...

Gee, the hilarity doesn't stop. Loved this one - - - (Well there was that one time when Raph, feeling rather bold, had actually walked up behind one particularly nervous guy who was complaining bitterly to his partner via radio why was it that HE had to come down in this dark smelly place full of all sorts of creepy things while the partner got to sit in the comfortable cab of the work truck, and tapped him on the back with an “Excuse me, Mister, but this is my HOME yer dissin’”.

Raph still maintained that it was worth all the punishments Splinter dealt out over that incident, just for the memory of that guy’s screaming and practically flying up that maintenance ladder. He’d even dropped his radio, for which Don had been extremely happy.

All of Mike's Places of Solitude. LOL

The last part, where Leo was ready to put aside his need to know, only to have that need rekindled by an errant lost piece of paper. Funny as heck.

Oh, Cyn, this is just a wonderful story. Definitely one of my favs. I think I've saved it there, too, but I'll do it again, just to make sure. I hope you update soon, but even if it takes you a while, I know it will be worth the wait.

Be blessed,
Rene'

The only new thing Raphael learned that day was how to scrub the toilet with a toothbrush. Of course, that had led to more trouble (“You didn’t say WHOSE toothbrush to use”), and Raph had had to eat his meals standing up for the next two days.

Oh, the best line, the BEST LINE! Reminds me of a story about how hotel cleaning crews really clean the bathrooms while the guests are out having fun. Hmm...thought that toothbrush looked a little frazzled. :0)

I've been playing catch-up, but the writing is so engaging that I just click to the next chapter before I can form a thought. The previous chapters to this one were marvelous as usual. So many chuckles and chortles from moi.

I like how you've labeled Leo as the (future) leader. :0) And capitalizing important words to imply interest was brilliant. May I use that little technique? All credit to you, of course. :0)

Okay, I kind have most of this MSHPSA translated. Michelangelo's Secret Hiding Place...but the SA eludes me.

Oh, you really know how to get poor Raphie into trouble. Um, scratch that, Buslady knows how to get him into trouble. Well, at least the punishment part. Muahahahaha

This chapter was great. Loved it!

On to chapter...what chapter? Checks - FIVE!

Tally HO

Rene'

I LOVE THIS!

I love the way Mikey seems to know more than he lets on. Seriously good story. Keep going please!

._.;;

In all honesty, I admire Leo for being so persistent and stubborn, (and maybe even headstrong,) cause if I had to endure "follow the not-leader" for so long, I would have pulled a Raph, screamed my head off and tackle-pounded Mike into paste, especially if I got the impression he KNEW I was following.. damn! XD;; so much for being ninja-stealthy!

Mike knows, I'm sure of it now, since Splinter apparently is aware of most of what's going on, but Leo is just so focused on getting this marred jigsaw puzzle solved, he's missing the actual clear picture before him.

Don had a nice way in describing this, though; lack of Raphael here makes me wonder if either doesn't give a hoot, or isn't as interested in the whole notebook thing as Leo is... then again, if I were Mike, I WOULD be worried if Raph wanted a look into that mystery book... uh oh...

i am really loving this story! i am also wondering what mike has been up to! i can't wait ta find out!
UPDATE SOON!!

Bah- I've been away from FF,net for too long, I keep hitting the 'add to favorites' instead of the review button-- kinda useless when said stories are already on my fav list! XD;;

But anyway, Mike is either knowing all along, or Leo is taking this a wee bit too seriously, cause his urgent need to figure out what Mike is doing will drive him insane- I mean, it's MIKE! Why would you try to figure out the Rubik cube in the first place? If he doesn't want Leo to find out, Leo wont, and nothing Leo can do will change it...

Now, I think Mike is (secretly) having too much fun with this, or something fishy is going on...

On a side note, love the way you phrase Leo's thoughts, having him Think Out So Loud makes it so Real somehow, like, I Know What I'm Doing! Seriously, I DO! Just... in a more child-like mindset! If I weren't worried Leo would get himself in a pickle jar, and in heaps of trouble, I'd be grinning from ear to ear wondering what kind of hell he'll get himself into...

XD I love seeing this side of Leo! Great job!

... now WHAT is Mikey up too?

lol... I love this story.
Please update soon!