I really like this story. I wish they would hired u to make a story for Avatar:The Last Airbender cause it will be so awesome. I like Ty Lee cause she act so young in her heart. Very cool story.

hello there.
the stor has promise, because i like it. but it's kind of hard to read because it's all mashed toghether in paragrahs.
There are also some gramar errors that are imposible to get wrong like gang (only one 'a')
anyway if this story is still alive please update it i would really like to see what it was exactly what you had in mind for this.