A great story. Very good.

aw, a very cute story... but... somehow somethings missing!

guess you should ad a lot of more details etc. Peter wouldnt just calm her down with some sentences...

work it over and it will be perfect =)

HQJ

nice plot, but add more details and more emotion or feeling to the story, cos it feels a bit 'boring'?

Perhaps you ought to change your pen name to "The girl couldnt write". Rather more fitting, no?

This is good very good oh and the rating should be K you might want to change that okay