Ok ok...
Well let's start somewhere I reaaaaally liked your plot, it is sooooo different an cool and all!
Hahahahaha!
I loved the way you wrote Sayu!
And don't worry the lemon is great!\\\\
Light and l together !
Sooooo cute!
I also loved Watari!
Poor Matsuda!TT-TT(I really believe you traumatized him!)
Well aside that please keep writing cuz it's really good!
Seriously!

well, I think they shouldn't have worried about their enemies finding out that L's real name is L Lawliet, because in the beginning it was said that the ones whose names have been written in the life note can't be killed with a death note, and L has had his name written by Raito to lenghten his lifespan

I love how beyond is the shinigami king :)

wait wouldn't the lifenote just use up his life force? so if he does it too much, he isn't immortal like ratio so...no more life fore: he would die, how anticlamatic is that? update!

Hey I just wanted to let you know how much I absolutely love this story! I just want to know if your ever going to finish it either on here or another site. Even if you don't though I know that ill still reread the chapters like crazy!

i'm in love with this fanfiction! i usually don't like LXLight fanfictions, but this is one of my few exceptions! XD lol

mORE! tHIS STory is My favOURIte! UPDate plEASe!

Um hi, this is Volku Newrealm, too lazy to find the login button again, just to say that I have been just waiting for you on chapter 31 all this time...
I still have faith in you!
If you start writing, I'm sure you can write more beautiful chapters! Please?
Your fanfiction is now the last updated on my list, and this list has about, kinda, 150 fictions on it.
I feel totally bad and, um, stuff for pestering you like such a complete pest, but this is kinda my go at a motivational speech sort of affair.

You have so many fans just waiting for you to update! :’D
Actually, it's been so long, I've forgotten what had happened up to this point, which is why I'm reading again.

Oh please? I'm so excited at the thought of a new chapter‹33

And it's almost my birthday too... -hinting at what I might like as a gift-

So anyway, that was me cheering you inside, like an internet “you're the champ” bro massage thing. -

Volkyyy

...Are you ever going to finish what you started? ›:(

I've had this fic on my watch list for more than months now...

A slightly sulky Volku

P.S PL3AS3?

...

*flips table in rage* WHYY LET THE STORY DIE? please update? please?

comment: absolutely in love with this chapter. in every possible way. :)

I've never faved a story so early on..

until now. :D

I'm not going to lie but this chapter was pretty unbelievable. But hey that's what fanfiction's about, but I had hope you'd keep Light "true-ish" to canon. Before this line "After he'd been falling for what felt like forever" I was in WTF! mode. There was too much going on in one spot. What with little mother telling all of his gifts. Light's really smart, I mean genius level and you writers couldn't make him find some of these things out by himself. It would have made it better plot-wise not just cram it into a paragraph. If he looked up the pagan sign on the internet or in a library if L lets him out of confinement after his pain induced fusion with himself, that would make sense. Gods are suppose to be cryptic and non helpful in some ways and you did say in the previous chapter that the King wanted some entertainment, but in this chapter you said both the king and little mother were going to die. I don't get it, do the King and little mother loop back into the past and merge with their past selfs like Light or do they cease to exist (like clean slate future) and only the past them exist. The other thing I had problems with is when you said if he got stabbed in the heart, he would die. I was confused because your pretty much saying he is immortal cause he's a semi god but he can die. That needs to be cleared up. I dont know, this is only chapter 4 and their is 31 chapter up, maybe it gets better but I have one more thing to say and its about the mate business. This could have been planned wayyyyy better, little mother could have hinted at the fact that Light could extend someones life indefinitely and that people in love don't hold back any secrets but Light is the one with the final decision to do the " I love you so I set you free or the I love you stay with me forever and by the way I am an ex mass murderer."

can't believe that you discontinued this story!waaa nooo it was one of the bests histories ever!

Mello, I totally forgot to put praise in my last review after I pointed out those mistakes...gomen. I have to say I like Raito being a shy little pervert and L being the seme here; its just so cute and FLUFFY! ITS SO FLUFFY I'M GONNA DIE! No, not really but, I just needed to say that line because it works with how I'm feeling with the story. I like the direction the story is going, I know I had to have to said that in past reviews when I first read this series but, who can disagree this series is bloody amazing and is just so addicting? I just love finding addictive stories then rereading them as much as I please for they are the reason fanfic to me is so worth reading. They make it fun and amusing and beautiful...As I say for one's bread and butter in fics, one is gonna need more then lemons and one shots for fanfic materials. Mah, I digress, now then to the few snitches I have found in this lovely fabric of a story.

I noticed you've tended to use the wrong uwhether/u in describing a either or choice situation. You use uweather/u which describes the atmosphere forcast of natural events like rain or windy days or blizzards, etc; you need to use like I just said earlier, the word whether in that context I described earlier before the weather one.

I noticed you did the aloud mistake from before. I'm just gonna keep it simple and just remind you its allowed, not aloud.

Well that's all the issues I see, I hope you keep up the good work and have a nice day/night (whatever it be).

Chow

CKL