Awesome story. The Stranger and Doc characters were exactly like their game counterparts. All the details, reactions, and responses stayed true to the Oddworld games. Loved it.
Please continue on with this. I really would like to see more from you. Once again great story.
-Tungsten117

Love it. It was well-written. C:

I really enjoyed reading this. You're writing style is excellent; I could just see everything you wrote in my head! It seems really realistic, too, like this is exactly how it happened. I hope you write more chapters, because i'll definately read them

[:cylonite:]

Well written and it neatly severed my simpathy for this guy.

Oh man, this is so awesome! I mean, it's long, it has good grammar, excellent spelling, awesome spoilers, and... oh man, all sorts of stuff.

And you make the Vykker doctor evilish like he should be. Sweet. Just how they always acted, such as with Munch and the fuzzles.

Anyways, I'm all about this being a multi-chapter thing! The one little idea you put sounds interesting for some... research, might I say.

One other thing - you did a great job on the whole... eh... what's it called... just old Western Speak, you know? Awesome job on that.

I expected to go all out on the finding mistakes, but I guess I don't have to!