I loved it but you know this could never have happened, right? Joshua never intended for Neku to become the Composer. If Neku had shot Joshua would have destroyed Shibuya. Still . . . I think I like this ending better ^I^

...Well, in a way I could see that coming. Neku's hurt to badly to continue...

Well written. Goodread.

that was... incredibly sad, and completely amazing.

AND THEN SHO BECAME COMPOSER. THE END.

Man, that was dark. Depressing as hell, man. But oh so very well-written. I actually think it was a little tame - maybe it would have been a little more hard-hitting if you had gone into the trauma part of it, but hay, it's a good fic in its own right. Keep it up.

Unlike Hayashi Nariiko, I freely admit I found this rather... Cute, in a warped, twisted, dark way.


I loved it. I can see this happening. Very well.


I don't care how twisted it may sound for me to say this is... Cute. It is. In a sick, warped sort of way, it's cute. And I like that, because I have no problems admitting I'm a twisted, sick person. I like this stuff.

This is heartbreaking. I like the voice in Neku's head, how he's imagining Joshua there (out of guilt of killing him, I assume), and the way it reacts to what he says. I also love how, after Joshua's death, Neku's anger and frustration is directed at him. In general... this is just really, really well-written. Great job.

I really have nothing to say, but this. Srsly.
Uhm, Neku..? D+

NO NEKU D:
Anyways. This was really..
I want to say cute, but that'd make me sound sick. Something on the same plane as cute but doesn't mean that..

...if that made any sense. xD

Thumbs up? ;D

I love this story. I love the twisted, symapthetic, guity-conscience vioce that may be Joshua, or may not be Joshua in Nekus' mind. I think, that if Neku had taken over shibuya, he would have turned all that he learned around, in the (game) story, he learned to be sympathetic instead of apathetic.

I like how you show his imidiate apathy towards the situation, and slowy sink into a kind of realized sympathy towards the end; as Neku begins to shape the vioce in his head as more than madness, but as a,] state of being, and a figure of loathing, grudgingly given, respect.
I like to think that Joshua is not Joshua but rather a concience than Neku cannot compeltly rid himself of.
I also liked how you wrote Mr. H's feelings on the situation as part of Neku's experiance as well.

All in all, this story is a masterpiece of madness and imagery. Congragulations. (Btw. I love all of your other TWEWY fanfiction too. :) )

Oh, wow... interesting stuff =) I like how it's sort of up to the reader to interpret whether Joshua's voice is real or just part of Neku's imagination. Good job!

That was kinda awesome, good stuff, I like how it really expands the idea of personal horizons. Because Neku didnt learn his lesson in your version it gives a potrayal of him slowly slipping into madness... I definately liked it keep up the good work

Awesome, I always wanted to see what a Dark!Neku would be like. Or an alternate series of events that led Neku to becoming composer.

Nice work.

Wow, who would have thought things could turn out this way. How did Joshua get into Neku's mind? So he's been there for three years? No wonder Neku has gone crazy.

'The job of Composer wasn’t one for the sane, he came to realize. No wonder Joshua did so well at it.'
As depressing as the line was suppose to be, I laughed at it.

You really explored the idea well. If Neku really shot Joshua, I'm pretty sure he couldn't be able to stay sane.

I really enjoyed reading this. Your style of writing is really great and you really know what kind of words to use to create a dark story.
'The gun fell to the floor in an oddly melodic clatter.'
To me, that one line felt so strong o.o It was perfect. Oh, and the way you ended your story. Wow, amazing job really. Nice work!

Ahh... Very dark. You really brought out Joshua's (and Neku's) personality. Nice twist. I love seeing TWEWY fanfictions, because I loved the game personally and I think it deserves much more publicity. There are some grammar and sentence structure problems, but nothing major.