 tsukihito 2009-01-16 . chapter 1I really like the way you told the story from the point of view of view of another classmate! Very unique approach! I think it adds a lot of depth and insight.
If I had to guess, I'd say the person was Yagyuu...because he plays doubles, seems like a person who hides behind a mask, likes classical music, and Rikkai has a redhead on their team.
Very dramatic story! Keep writing!! |
 MizZ SenTimEntAl PoPp 2008-12-21 . chapter 1I'm pretty sure this is Fuji, but Fuji doesn't have a doubles partner, and he's not that guy who would ruffle his hair and those things. Nice story though, I like the angst. Please tell me who it is! I'm going crazy..ah!! FUJI!! |
 Kid9535 2008-08-20 . chapter 1... No smiler has a doubles partner. I would know. Anyway, I'm pretty sure it's Fuji and the 'doubles partner' (No smiler has a doubles partner) is probably Kawamura, red head is Eiji (or Gakuto, but Gakuto is Oishitari's doubles', or Marui, but Sanada would freak first, did you know almost every school team has one red head? It was mentioned in a fic so it's like an unspoken rule). Ah, she liked Saeki, Tezuka and one of the twins which I forgot the name.
I almost thought it wasn't an OC, until the third paragraph where you mentioned 'girl'. I originally thought it had something to do with Yukimura and Sanada who knows Rondo (it couldn't possibly have been Atobe). (I don't think Oshitari smiles all that much) Plus, I don't think, Fuji would muss up his hair and well, Yukimura? He values tennis a lot more to just throw his life away. Smoking is Niou and Akutsu's thing. Ah plothole, you said he slouched against the wall smoking a cigarette, you didn't mention he got back up and went to the strippers' and while it is a convention, it still is a plothole.
The ending is nice. One sentence, 'Thus ends my testimonial to the deceased' Short, sweet and to the point.
If you did an anonymous school, (like Higa Chuu, or any of the ones I don't know which consist of non-Seigaku, Hyotei and Rikkai.) I am most definitely at a loss. The only smilers...wait. Don't tell me...no, it can't be. Unless it's someone normal (or abnormal considering Tenipuri characters) like Sengoku. No he's the redhead.
Ahaha, I give. I would have tortured you more because of the OC (I really don't like them) but you're a good authoress, so I'll spare you. As well as I suck at writing.
(I don't know why everyone thinks it's Eiji. He's the redhead...redheads are the usually cheerful ones, but they clash with your angst moment.) |