Great concept and execution in this story. It's couragous, telling the same story from a different postion. Be sure to include all the elements of a Cloverfield monster attack, like decapitated statues, parasites, exploding statues and all that jazz!

Just one general rule of thumb. Put each piece of dialouge in a new paragraph instead of just one big one. Other than that, well done, and good luck!

I love it! Please continue!

Awesome couple of chapters. Update soon!

Its a really interesting story, seeing that its taking a view point from pre-teens and no camera. I hope you continue this!