Fabolous!

Wow! You sure did write this very vividly. I actually think you wrote more than Stephenie Meyer would have. You should be very proud of yourself.

I'm Team Jacob, but this was written very well. It gives just enough detail without being foul and definately captures Meyer's writting style.

Job well done!

this was seriously THE best breaking dawn 'missing scene' that i have ever read in my entire life. congrats!

Wonderfully written. This was so tasteful and beautiful. Thank you! I loved it!

need more rough sex
like something to do with the breast, **, and **
that would even better

Excellent! I feel it fit right in! Thanks!

it was exacly how i think mrs.myer would right it

simply fabulous!

thank you :D

i liked it it was tasteful it kept with the story line i agree i would hve loved this scene inthe book...

Hot, Hot, Hot !

I really like it!!
This id do sweet!!
Thank you!!

I like it.

omg that was by far the best version of bella and edwards first time on this website...possibly the whole internet!!
great job

I've read this a bunch of times, and everytime I do it just keeps getting better. This is truly the best canon one shot I've ever read. Love it.