Wonderful. I especially like how you utilized his inexperience and point of view.

This is an excellent one-shot story. You've packed a lot of the emotion and story of a civilian's perspective of battle into a short piece-and done it well.

As Mosin noted, the bystanders often get overlooked.

Very nice!

A good look at the "Bystanders" of an invasion.

Not real important, but I personally doubt he could see into a mech's cockpit, I always assumed they were tinted, or one-way.

Other than that everything look good!

Pretty good. I liked it, is this just a one shot or is going to continue, and its also good to see another writer. I recommend some of the "bigshots" on here, lie Kat Wilder, RogueBaron, Sentinel28,and JA Baker.

And of course me, the second newest(now)writer on the block.

Keep it up :)