GAH! How could you stop it there?! I wanna know more!

aw! please continue soon!

I was laughing when I read that Kaiba had hardly any dating experience... OMG that was funny! Keep up the good work.

"You!" Bakura said glaring at Mariku. Mariku looked behind him hoping that maybe Atemu was behind him but quickly realized he meant him.
That part was the cutest! Out of all of the story, that was the cutest! But hey, you really need to work on your description and dialogue. I'm not trying to be mean, you've got a good story here, but the character's actions are almost robotic, and though you got the personalities down. For the dialogue, try pretending the characters are standing right next to you talking amongst themselves. Like they're real people.

I absolutely love this story.. Please update when you can..

Yay! Keep up the good work. I loved it.