I really liked this. You know I'm not an AJ fan past WWRLAM, but I still liked it even though I kept mixing up Alanna and Thayet as 'the Queen' even after I knew for sure that Alanna was the queen. I really loved your characterisation of Alanna. She was just so relaxed and comfortable with herself, and just generally larger than life. And I loved how amused she was by Daine's confusion, and the way she just grinned and winked at her. It would've been a priceless scene to watch happening!

Great job, I think you did really well at bringing all the characters to life, and you obviously took a lot of time keeping things similar to the book but also changing them in your own way.

I was just as confused as Diane.

That was hilarious! I loved the misunderstanding, it made sense and what everyone said could have gone both ways. That was simply brilliant.

lol, even with the summary i was as confused as daine!

I really hope you post how things ended up like this. I love this version of Tortall.

The button is now green. Interesting author notes - sounds like you have a commercial side as well. This fanfic sure shows a different side of you. Yeah, I decided to take a read after remembering you saying something about 'posh on paper' - and you're right to some extent. Being a fanfic and me being not too familiar with them, I won't comment too much on the story and the rest of it - like I'll assume description is mainly scarce due to readers being familiar with the scenery already.

This piece does feel fantasy and mythical - writing wise - the almost classic style but not quite - I wonder if you always write like this. It almost reminds me of how I once wrote - not for good or bad - just things like commas after every 'and' and talk about commas then. I noticed a lot of similarities - sentence structure, phrasing - not quite - but similar.

What gets me is the 'telling' - though some parts are hard to show properly - I believe I just got told off too much that I got accustomed to disliking it.

I haven't read the original, but this sounds interesting on its own - not so much I guess since it's hard to relate, but still. Kudos for the vocab and grammar.

hanyan! there's something to be said here: i wish this was canon. gods, do i. poor Daine, i certainly shared her confusion ... eccentric indeed! very well written; it's a believable alternative, and i'm impressed at how well you've made things work between the characters, and how well they've adapted to Tamora's plot despite the, shall we say, mixed relationships.

This story is excellent as well!

This is an awesome story. I think that Daine's confusion is hilarious.

Great story! It really threw me for a loop halfway through the story when I realized that I (like Daine) had the complete wrong end of the stick concerning who was queen of Tortal. The plot was interesting and unexpected and you gave certain characters vastly different roles in life without changing their personalities. Joden is a adorable! I would love to read more fics set in this alternate storyline if you are inclined to write them.

I love this story. When I got to the when Diane realizes who was Queen the first time I was really confused. I ended up having to go back and read it again. Fantastic job with this story and I hope to read the prequel soon.

I really enjoyed this story and joined Daine in her confusion at the beginning over who was Queen! :)
However I found the overall story slightly disjointed with not enough background and joining paragraphs - some introduction at the beginning would also not have gone amiss.
But I did really enjoy reading it :D

that was so unbelievably cool. i was just as confused as daine was. awesomely done. I REALLY WANT TO HEAR THAT STORY!

I pressed the button ~I want the other story!

But as for this one - I must be clueless too then, because I couldn't tell until Daine's big relevation. But once I knew, all the clues from before starting clicking into place. Very well woven ~

very good story. I hope you oontinue it. And yes i would very much like to here Sir Myles' tale.