Aw this was so sweet I LOVED it! I love the stories that show how much Archie really cares for Edith! They give me the fuzzies! xD

What a beautiful story!

The writing was good, and I like how you wrote the way Archie speaks in his accent/dialect(if you can call it that). It helped me hear is voice when he spoke as I read this story.

I hope you write many more stories as good as this one.

Keep Writing

I laughed when Edith said she had no family stories to tell.

How about bringing Gloria and Joe back to New York? I mean, I never liked the idea of Edith being killed off altogether. Bring in the Jefferson's, the Willis', and the Lorenzo's, too. Overall, great job. Keep up the good work.