|Reviews for An Indiana Summer|
| Chris000 9/26/09 . chapter 11
| StarShineDC 6/25/09 . chapter 10
L. M. A. O. Can I get an Amen?
Loved it. As soon as Wright showed, I cracked up. I KNEW it was gonna get ugly and, damn, did it ever. I love that "you" were chucked out so quickly. HA.
But even that'll be spun by the press, I'm sure.
| Chris000 6/22/09 . chapter 10
I'd watch it with all of that political accusation there. There are places to voice your concerns all over the internet but don't overdo it here on FF.
Don't get me wrong, I like your stories, but if anything, keep your political views to yourself.
| StarShineDC 5/30/09 . chapter 9
I like Megan, lol. It's a simple name. X3 And the character seems rather interesting, as well. Though, really, for Eggman to get that close, he'd never just STOP working on it. Then again, Eggy NEVER seems to finish the best of his inventions. And his nephew..That's the weird squiggly-haired one with the pointy nose? Snifely? Or something like that...
Anyway, I like this chapter, lol.
| Chris000 5/30/09 . chapter 9
Nice, NICE! We have plot, ladies and gentlemen!
I like where this is going. Robotnik had the decency to keep our hero alive after that attack. What happened to the others though? Were they captured?
"There's the door!"
Somehow sir, you just made that line epic.
I think that this portayal of Kintobor was accurate, although I don't know if he'd be quick to dispose of the only human (thus far) to oppose him. Just hope they don't come after this Hoosier so quickly.
Also, to all you other readers, show some decency, review when you read. Don't let me and Star have all the fun! (I hate to advertise, but can someone take a look at my stuff too?)
Good stuff, man. Good stuff!
| StarShineDC 5/27/09 . chapter 8
I have officially reviewed every chapter
For anyone else, I would demand a cookie
But this story, for some reason, demands some level of intelligence
So I'll settle for you clapping, even though I can't see nor hear you
Anyway, the short bit of action was actually rather good
But here's where your immense detail gets a little out of hand, slowing it down
I've been known to do the same or put too little detail and, personally, find action scenes to be the hardest to properly write
And I like that Eggman's been shot
It's about time someone just SHOOTS him
He's not exactly invincible
| StarShineDC 5/27/09 . chapter 7
Law & Order
Anyway, I'm thinking you actually like (or at least tolerate) Blaze?
And you acknowledge her OOCness, which is a major plus, and you explain Sonic's
And, yes, Sally is Gordon
I hate them both.
| StarShineDC 5/27/09 . chapter 6
Is that actually true or just something you pulled out of a hat?
| StarShineDC 5/27/09 . chapter 5
I'd be afraid to joke with cops about...anything
And, based solely on your writing style, I think you would actually have the foresight to dirty your vacuumed car on purpose
| StarShineDC 5/27/09 . chapter 4
You call them "horndogs"
I swear I read it "hornhogs" about 6 times before seeing the d
They're OOC in this chapter, but that's fine
It usually irks me, but this is just too interesting
| StarShineDC 5/27/09 . chapter 3
I realized this from the rp's, but this chapter sort of explodes it into Obvious Land
You are incredibly detailed
I enjoy it
As to the rest of it - the political conversation - it's very clever and, assuming someone didn't X out upon reading "man child" Obama, someone could actually learn something
You're very liberal
And, just curious, but have you always detested Sonic?
| StarShineDC 5/27/09 . chapter 2
I have a slight problem with this one and that's tenses
You use them interchangeably and that's mildly annoying
"Buckle up," I instruct.
Is followed by...
"So, how long will it take?" Sonic asks.
Just a few paragraphs later
Other then that...
Well, it wasn't a boring chapter
Sonic eating all of your food in 5 seconds is pretty funny
Good thing you're going to Wal-Mart to rescue lughead Knuckie
| StarShineDC 5/27/09 . chapter 1
Okay, all four boxes checked
Only chapter one and this is pretty fascinating
Though, wow, anyone else would've needed serious drugs to stay still while getting BURNED
I sure as hell would
| Chris000 5/7/09 . chapter 7
Unfortunately I think the title of this chapter sounds a bit appropriate.
Dude, we need to see some sort of plot development. Talking is nice but try not to make a habit of it. I do admire your knowledge on automotives and explosive devices though. Let's get this puppy moving! I sense potential here!
| Chris000 4/14/09 . chapter 5
Heh, the traffic light scene was cute. Looking forward to seeing this go on.