Oh, I so wanna know what happens to Tyri. Wonder what Skye with say or do when he finds out what happened. I think mine makes 5 so do you think you can post the next part, please...pretty please.

Okay first of all, why the hell do you call it a one shot if you intend to continue?

Secondly, if you're going to stop the story just to insert an author's note that has no meaning tot eh story and jsut waste's the readers time, you might as well flip everybody off. There's no reason to stop the story like that.

And last of all, one of the worst things a writer can do is hold a story ransom just to get reviews. What kind of horrible person are you, threatening not to update a story just because you don't get enough reviews screaming "I LURV DIS STRY CONTINUE!1!" You shouldn't care about how many reviews you get, you should wirte because you want to. That's what writers do - they write! You should do it out of passion, not to up your review count. What you are doing is horrible and is deeply frowned upon. As a writer you should be ashamed of yourself.

For these three reasons, I frown upon ye and thy story is from here on out, FAILURE!

1. Fail automatically for review wh0ring. Do not pass go, do not collect 200 dollars.

2. It's not a oneshot if you intend to continue.

It's a shame, really. If you hadn't pulled off such a fanbrat move, I'd be inclined to say it was a good start. It shows potential.

A very good start. But eventually your going to do something that will make us want to evisarate you, i just know it. Anywho pretty good story lets see where it leads to.

Yup, really deep in this story, and boy, is my sub-conscience loving it, too bad my actual conscience still BARELY understands what happened (Didn't I tell you, I'm bad with symbolism, and your laughing at me now, Most people would be hurt, but my conscience doesn't understand why your laughing, so I'll join in an the fun.) MWhahaha!, Tyri has a messed up eye, get her an eye-patch and call her a pirate, Argh!

(O-G's sub conscience: Great job! loving to see this. (O-G's conscience walks in) "Who are you? Get outta my head!")

And didn't you know, I'm evil too, you're gonna have to wait a while for the next chapter to get up on my story (while i think of funny things to happen.). Hideo Kojima taught me the meaning of SUSPENSE (and procrastination). xD

That one guy who throws the Pin, and not the grenade.

Opengunner xD