omg! lol this is really, really super cute! kaoru is in denial. he is totally gay!! and btw, i thot i'd tell you that i really like all your stories! they are all so good!
xox, nikki

ah! T'was very good, me thinks -nod-nod- LOL at the last 2 lines- Kaoru: Who are you trying to kid!? ^_^

last line made me smirk. interesting read. couldn't really find any glaring typos or mistakes, so yay.

wonderful ending youve got there ^^

Haha, I loved it. :D Kaoru, you're definitely gay! He's a lot more gay than Hikaru anyway xD

Denial is so funny. xD I liked how the transition between the more serious, brotherly tone to the less serious, more sexy brotherly tone wasn't awkward and was done within the space of one... wait, two sentences. And personally, I thank you for not adding crimson or rose or ruby, garnet, scarlet, or any other red synonyms in that line where Kaoru blushes. Because that would have been tragic. xD The overall tone (vibe) that I got from it was one that wasn't too serious, but not filled with that humor usually associated with the twins. Also, I applaud you for doing this in 1,0 words or less. I would have killed myself trying.

The two quotes you used fit really well. As far as criticism goes, I just got a tad confused toward the beginning when you were talking about the two twins, but not saying their names. -shrugs- it's probably just me though. =)

DISZ WUZ SOO GUDD IS LURVD IT SO MUCH! [/end English abuse]

I love these two, thank you for taking them out to play. This was so cute and you did a great job with the prompts. Your characterization; representing Hikaru as very “in the now” and Kaoru recognizing the potential changes and fretting over them, was also very well done.

The writing looked very clean and I didn’t pick up on any typos or spelling errors. The story was well paced and complete as a one-shot. Another reviewer mentioned the use of “aurelian” for the color of the twin’s eyes. I think “golden in color” is an apt description for their eye color as it is represented in the anime (I don’t remember –or if it is even mentioned- what their eye color is in the manga). As a designer, I’ve found that how people see colors, isn’t absolute. People always seem to have a differing opinion on color descriptors. So while she/he didn’t think “aurelian” quite fit, I think it did. Gotta, love the abstract. :)

Over all, it was a fun read and would love the opportunity to see the second version.

Astrolabe

Aww short and sweet C: Nice choice of words too.. Hehe I loved the ending x) Impressive, Nice work!

Oh Lord, that was the best ending for the prompt line: “If it makes you feel better to believe that, go right ahead.” I love those twins so much! ^_^

I didn't notice any mistakes--though I may have been distracted by the fluff, but you seem to have trouble with the "--", like when a character's speech is cut off by another. If you use Microsoft Word like me, type "whateveryouwanthimtosay--p" and click the Space bar. It automatically turns into a solid, single black line. Just go back and erase the p.

--Squito

Really cute! nice job. I really like how Hikaru was all "lover"-like to Kaoru (but of course! I am a fan) but it just seemed like a really interesting way of looking at Kaoru's fear - and Hikaru's way of dealing with that fear - all in a very short, nicely done little fic. :D
What really struck me was the vocabulary... or really, one word in particular: "aurelian". I've read a LOT of different descriptions of the twin's eyecolor (and haircolor) so THAT was an interesting word. xD it's a synonym for gold, but is that true color-wise? I think it's kinda funny (if it was a mistake, a rather intelectual one).
Anyways, good job! and I would love to see the other version posted sometime! It sounds interesting ^_^
ganbatte~